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    Smile Language of the world

    Hello Everyone here,

    I'm a new member here, I've been learning English sice I was in my Junior School, now I wanna practice my Writing skills here, hope everyone can give me some advice and I'll be very appriciated~~~~~here goes the article:


    People from different countries speak entirely different languages.. However, it does exists one type of language which connects all the people all around the world without misunderstanding, that magic item is the Music.


    It is impossible to live in a world without music, it can not only relieve your stress after work and help yourself calm down, but also turn you on and have passion to reach your dream. An elegantly fluent piano melody is just like a crystal-clear stream of water flowing through your outrageous inner world, irrigating your hearts; on the other side, a tedious life could be on fire with an energetic pop music and let you wave with the rythem of love.


    There are many different kinds of music throughout the world. One may argue about the importance of their traditional own music comparing with the international one. In my opinion, they are the same on the scale of music. Because each type is an outcome of many years of music history, it belongs to a nation of their own. We should remember and carry forward our own type, at the same time, show our respect and appreciation to others’.


    Traditional music can bring foreigners to a brand-new world, let them start a new adventure which they’ve never had before, while the international music injects a fresh blood to us and let us feel every cell of their years of culture.


    Music is a world language for people living under the same sky, we own and share the music together.

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    Default Re: Language of the world

    Quote Originally Posted by anniehouston7 View Post
    Hello Everyone here,

    I'm a new member here. I've been learning English since I was in my Junior School. Now I wanna want to practice my writing skills here. I hope everyone can give me some advice and I'll it will be very appreciated. Here goes the article:
    We like everybody to try to write correct English here. ~~~~~ is not English punctuation. 'Wanna' is not correct English. You can't join multiple sentences with commas.

    People from different countries speak entirely different languages.. Two dots is not English punctuation. A period consists of one dot.
    There's a start. The rest of your paragraph is full of inappropriate commas. You'll need to find legitimate ways of joining sentences, or start a new one.

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    Default Re: Language of the world

    Thank you so much for correcting my English. I'll learn to use punctuations well in the future.

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