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    Default Re: help me in writing a letter

    You need to use complete sentences that end in periods/full stops and break this into paragraphs. What you have is a rambling loosely connected set of phrases that is simply exhausting to try to read. Also, use real words like "because" instead of text-words like "bcoz" and check your writing so you use the correct word like "no" instead of "know."
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    When you write about this day that your bus was late, were you already dating her? You seem to know her wardrobe very well.
    Is "Angel Eyes" your nickname for her?
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    Okay, if I'm being honest with you, the level of knowledge you have or had about her wardrobe and purses is really creepy if she wasn't already deeply a part of your life. It feels like you've been spying on her! You sound like a man who is obsessed. It would make me extremely uncomfortable to get a letter like that and I don't feel comfortable editing it.

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    Default Re: help me in writing a letter

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Okay, if I'm being honest with you, the level of knowledge you have or had about her wardrobe and purses is really creepy if she wasn't already deeply a part of your life. It feels like you've been spying on her! You sound like a man who is obsessed. It would make me extremely uncomfortable to get a letter like that and I don't feel comfortable editing it.


    I am male, and so old that much of the flirtatious language of my youth would have me locked away today. Even so, I felt distinctly uncomfortable when I read that letter.
    Please do not edit your question after it has received a response. Such editing can make the response hard for others to understand.


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    I'm sorry, but I really don't want to have anything more to do with this thread. If she is your gf she won't care about your grammar. If she's not, I would expect a restraining order.
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    Default Re: help me in writing a letter

    Seemingly, even the OP could no longer bear to read his own words. Thread closed.
    Remember - correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing make posts much easier to read.

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