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    Default Please check for errors (Compare and contrast essay outline)

    Hello teachers,

    I would be very grateful if you could kindly help me check if the the following contains any errors.

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    Kenneth

    Compare and contrast between a school and a university.


    Thesis statement

    In spite of several characteristics that can be found in both schools and universities, there are undeniably things that distinguish them from one another.


    Topic sentence 1 (Compare)

    A school resembles a university in a way that both places are designated for learning; they are where students acquire knowledge.

    Supporting sentences

    -A school is an institution offering a system of compulsory public education.
    [IMG]file:///C:/DOCUME%7E1/Kenneth/LOCALS%7E1/Temp/msohtml1/01/clip_image001.jpg[/IMG]Certain schools offer a system of education dedicated to learning within one particular field, such as a school of journalism.
    -A university is an institution of higher education and of research.
    [IMG]file:///C:/DOCUME%7E1/Kenneth/LOCALS%7E1/Temp/msohtml1/01/clip_image001.jpg[/IMG] Grants academic degrees at all levels in a variety of fields.


    Topic sentence 2 (Compare)

    A school and a university are also common in terms of their structural and prominent features.

    Supporting sentences

    -A school and a university each consists of a head, teachers, students, and staff workers.
    [IMG]file:///C:/DOCUME%7E1/Kenneth/LOCALS%7E1/Temp/msohtml1/01/clip_image001.jpg[/IMG]A principal is the head of a school while a dean is the head of a university. Those who teach in a school are simple known as ‘teachers’ whereas in a university, teachers are known as lecturers and tutors. Students are found in both places.
    -Facilities such as classrooms, libraries, staff rooms, halls, and basketball courts can be found in both schools and universities.


    Topic sentence 3 (Contrast)

    -A school puts more importance on formality but a university does not emphasize much on it.

    Supporting sentences

    -School uniforms are to be worn by all school children in our country but in a university, we are allowed to wear the clothes we are comfortable with as long as it is not against the dress codes.
    -An assembly is held at least biweekly (if not weekly) in a school but in a university, having an assembly only occurs once in a blue moon.
    [IMG]file:///C:/DOCUME%7E1/Kenneth/LOCALS%7E1/Temp/msohtml1/01/clip_image001.jpg[/IMG]During assembly, prefects will check on each and every student whether or not they keep long fingernails, and etc.


    Topic sentence 4 (Contrast)

    -A school and a university are dissimilar in terms of the assignments given.

    Supporting sentences

    -Students are given homework whereby the answers can usually be found from the text books or the notes.
    -In university level, students almost always have to do extensive researches in order to be able to complete their assignments.


    Conclusion

    -In spite of several differences, both schools and universities are great places to acquire knowledge.
    -So long as a student is willing to work hard and improve, he/she will be able to excel in both school and university.



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    A school resembles a university in a way that both places are designated for learning; they are where students acquire knowledge. A school is an institution offering a system of compulsory public education. In some countries, certain schools offer a system of education dedicated to learning within one particular field such as a school of dance, a school of economics, a school of journalism, and so forth. On the other hand, a university is an institution of higher education and of research. It grants academic degrees at all levels including bachelor, master, and doctor, in a variety of fields. The more educated we are, the more knowledge we will gain. This, of course, secures our future.

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    Can anyone please help? Thanks...

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    extensive researches- research
    This, of course, secures our future.- This seems a bit strong for me- it is not guaranteed- try 'should secure'

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