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    Default Abstract for my school-leaving exam

    There must be a lot of mistakes regarding the use of words....

    The 5 days take place in the wonderful city of Schladming. Schladming is a charming mining town offering a high standard of living. It is the economic center of the Dachstein-Tauern region. The open-mindedness, hospitality and organizational skills of the population have earned Schladming an international reputation as a town of tourism, sports, culture and conferences. The hotel Royer at the outskirts of the city is the perfect accomodation for the execution of my week. The hotel features seminar facilities, which meet the requirements perfectly and the hotel is located in the vicinity of the sport grounds. The 5 days are divided in its order of events: The first half of the 5 days is dedicated to the sports meetings and the second half is devoted to the seminars. The execution of seminars and the outdoor-activities are set up as priorities. The seminars serve to improve the successes in sales and are chaired by professional trainers. The outdoor-activities consist of rafting, canyoning and a visit to the „Hochseilgarten”. The Best Adventure Company is the organizer of all three and contributes, with its years of experience, to the success of the project. Teambuilding is given special empahsis and the activities should help the members to be more successful in their professional life. The 10 participants are insurance agents of the insurance company Gerling. Due to the positive annual accounts the head of the department wants to reward his employees.

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    Default Re: Abstract for my school-leaving exam

    at the outskirts- I'd use 'on the outskirts'
    features seminar facilities- has conference facilties (sounds better than seminar to me)
    in its order of events- by order..
    The execution of seminars- Holding the seminars and .... are the priorities

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    Default Re: Abstract for my school-leaving exam

    Thank you. I thought there would be more mistakes

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    Are there any commas missing in the text?

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    Default Re: Abstract for my school-leaving exam

    You could ad these:
    mining town, offering
    annual accounts,
    empahsis, and

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