Official letter, please tell me weather its is wright or not.

[shalanshardul]

APPLICATION

date: 3/6/2014

TO,
The Director,
XYZ, Mumbai

Subject : Permission to stay in hostel

sir,
My name is abc, I was I was there in hostel last 1 year but one year is still remaining to complete my graduation. The outside rent rooms are costly to live and i can't afford those. Here I can concentrate on my study and my research work.
So please grant me permission to stay in hostel.
Thanks.

yours faithful
abc

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

I stayed in the hostel last year, and I still have one year remaining to complete my graduation. The hostel is affordable, and there I can concentrate on my studies and my research work.

Yours faithfully,
ABC

 

[Tarheel]

P.S. Weather is rain and wind, etc.

 

[Barb_D]

And a "wright" makes wheels. You want to know whether it's "right" or not.