[General] check my PhD Cover letter please.

[Gspano]

Hi everybody,
this is my first post in this forum, so I want to greet this community!!
I am currently writing a cover letter for a PhD in Organic Chemistry. I am not sure about my grammar and about the fact that the letter.
Thank you all in advance. Here is my letter:

Dear Prof. ***,

I am GS , writing this letter to explore the possibility of finding a suitable doctoral position in your esteemed research group. I have completed my master degree with specialization in Organic Chemistry at University of ****. in December 2013.
During my last academic year, I had a chance to do my internship and master thesis in Department of Organic Chemistry University of ****. There I developed my knowledge in organic synthesis testing and studying reactivity of benzendisulfonimmide as new catalyst in reactions of formation of new CC bonds.
I tested reactivity of carbocations generated in situ from alcohols, for acid-catalyzed elimination of a water molecule, and styrenes, in the presence of catalytic amounts o-benzendisulfonimmide, with various nucleophiles trying to optimize the reaction conditions always turning our gaze at the Green Chemistry: solventless reactions, atom economy and at room temperature.

After my graduation, I worked for **** s.r.l. where my research work dealt with synthesis of strigolactones, using coupling reactions catalyzed by transition metals, and cyclization reactions and allylic bromination.

Since March I decided to spend a short period abroad, to be more precise in Cambridge, to improve my English.

Finally I just sat for a exam to be a registered chemists.

I have explored your department’s website in detail, and it seems like an excellent fit for me because I could follow my career goal of becoming an organic chemist, for these reason I will glad if you accept me as a member of your research group.

I must add here that my budget does not let me to pay the tuition as it is very expensive and I am in need of receiving scholarship, so it would be a kind of you take this case in your considerations.

I have attached a brief resume of mine to this e-mail that contains further information about my qualifications and experiences. Should you want further information, please contact me.

I know you are very busy so I appreciate any time you can give me. Thanks very much.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely,
GS

 

[Tarheel]

In AE I am pretty sure it's master's degree.

Say:

Finally, I sat for an exam to be a registered chemist.
For these reasons I would be glad if you would accept me as a member of your research group.
I cannot afford the tuition....
Please take that into consideration.
my qualifications and experience.

 

[koka001]

Please help me and corrects me errors, Poorly know English, please help me i want it urgently

Motivation Letter
Your Name: Koka Kotia
Private number: 29001035823
MA Registration Number: 401013985
E-mail address: kokakotia@yahoo.com
Telephone number: 599107754
Dear sirs,
I wish to apply to the Master of Business Administration program at Ilia State University for the 2014 autumn intake. This program is a solid step towards my future career as a businessperson who understands and appreciates science and technology. The master program of your university is the best instrument to deepen my knowledge in the relevant fields of business administration and to succeed in achieving my goal.
There are three key reasons why I want to study at this program. First, I selected your program because of its primary focus on business with the expectation that students already possess a strong understanding of science. Second, a fellow student of the program, has provided me with his thoughts about the program. From our conversations, I became excited to learn about the courses such as management. And last, I wish to grow to be a manager who can combine the science of technology with the art of management. Aside from the favorable learning environment of Ilia State University, I most enjoyed its academic freedoms and active pluralism. The Economist has a unique vision of the world of style. My goal is to develop and refine our thinking in this style as possible, to give a wider scope of my education. It means a chance to see some in-depth theoretical and practical issues, which I'm sure will play a key role in the master's degree.
My future plan next five year is to start a career as Business Analyst. The master program of your university is the best instrument to deepen my knowledge in the relevant fields of managment and information technology and to succeed in achieving my goal. It furthermore provides the chance to study in an international environment which will be important for enhancing my intercultural competence and language skills.
I believe that this Master Program will contribute to the evolution of my career as it suits perfectly with my future goals, It also would allow me to develop my skills. I am sure that studying the courses included in this Master Program will let me better understand how to take strategic decisions and how to provide competitive responses. Ilia State University graduate program provides the specific knowledge and skills that are essential to achieving these goals. I hope that I will become a worthy member of the ISU academic environment.

I want to write about one problems of export, which is very important for our country. Specifically, I would like to draw your attention to the fruit and vegetable exports. Georgian fruit and vegetables sold in local markets due to low demand complicated. Export fewer products undergo a major reason for the Russian market halt. I think first of all it is necessary to solve this problem is to open up the EU market, otherwise it will be a local problem. The Russian market is closed for us, in my opinion superior to the EU market. The consumer market for Georgian products is not satisfactory. Importantly, the political will is there. Construction of cold storage facility will allow us to keep the fruits of the season and in the winter to export. I think we need to develop an export program that will protect the local market and farmers.

Thank you for your attention and consideration. I look forward to your acceptance.

Yours sincerely, Date: 27.08.2014
Koka Kotia