[Idiom] Letter correction for inscription as specialist

[Alejo38]

Dear Sir/ Madam,

could you please, correct this letter?

I thank you a lot for your help.

Regards.

Alejandro


Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing in order to request information about theregistration as specialist.

I am a fully registered medical practitioner with a licenceto practise and I wouldlike to get registration as Specialist.

Could you, please, indicate the next step in order to get it?

I thank you for your help.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully.

 

[Tarheel]

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing in order to request information about the registration as a specialist.

I am a fully registered medical practitioner with a license to practise, and I would like to register as a specialist.

Could you please indicate the next step to take?

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully.

Shouldn't you indicate what kind of medical practitioner you are and what kind of specialist you want to become?

 

[TheParser]

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I would like to know how to register as a specialist.

I am a registered medical practitioner specializing in ophthalmology.

Thank you for your help.



Sincerely yours,


George Washington

***** NOT A TEACHER *****

NOTES:

1. Thanks to Tarheel for his suggestion that you mention your specialty.
2. I think that learners and even some native speakers make a big mistake by starting a letter with the words "I am writing ...."




James

 

[Alejo38]

Thank you very much!!