please some one write in a better way

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i would like to write a letter to the one company that they are good working with us long time and we respect their loyal business with us .
now we want to tell them that they have outstanding amount xxx. and there is problem in the balance for last year . we will check with higher management and we will inform . mean while u pay what the balance amount.

i want to write this in good enlgish
 

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I would like to write a letter to [STRIKE]the one[/STRIKE] a company to tell them that they [STRIKE]are good working with us[/STRIKE] they have been good customers for a long time and we respect their loyalty [STRIKE]business[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] to us.
Now we want to tell them that they have an outstanding [STRIKE]amount[/STRIKE] payment of xxx (no full stop here) and that there is problem [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] with the balance of payments for last year. I want to say that we will check the details with [STRIKE]higher[/STRIKE] our upper management and [STRIKE]we will inform[/STRIKE] then confirm with them. [STRIKE]mean while[/STRIKE] In the meantime, [STRIKE]yo[/STRIKE][STRIKE]u[/STRIKE] they must pay what [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] balance. [STRIKE]amount.[/STRIKE]

I want to write this in good English.

Please note my corrections above in red. Before you try to write the letter, please read and follow these rules of written English:

- Start every sentence with a capital letter.
- End every sentence with a single, appropriate punctuation mark.
- Always capitalise the word "I".
- Always capitalise proper nouns (English, Microsoft, France, Shakespeare).
- Do not put a space before a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
- Always put a space after a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.

We don't write letters for you. You will have to make an attempt to write the letter yourself, post it here and then we will look at it.
 
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