vbalci
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Hello, can you edit and grade my Toefl practice essay? Thank you!
People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more.
Unfortunately, our world is ruled by capitalism that means money is the most important thing in our lives because the system wants us to earn money and spend it since anything is free, even the water. In other words, people need money to live and they work to earn it. However, there are some other reasons that people work such as If they like their job, they work for relish.
As the human nature, every human’s characters are different. Some of us fight to achieve their goals and some of us are too lazy to even stand up. When the ones who try to reach their goals succeed, they would be happy about it and feel satisfied. It is the same in business life because people make a great effort to achieve their position in their career. To reach the goal of the dream job makes people satisfied and distressed because doing the job you want is like doing a hobby, since you are doing it willingly, and it brings self-fulfillment.
So, money is really important for us to continue to live our lives in comfort and we should work to earn it but there are more reasons that are different from earning money. In my opinion, one the most remarkable reasons to work is to make your wish about career come true, and feel satisfaction.
People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more.
Unfortunately, our world is ruled by capitalism that means money is the most important thing in our lives because the system wants us to earn money and spend it since anything is free, even the water. In other words, people need money to live and they work to earn it. However, there are some other reasons that people work such as If they like their job, they work for relish.
As the human nature, every human’s characters are different. Some of us fight to achieve their goals and some of us are too lazy to even stand up. When the ones who try to reach their goals succeed, they would be happy about it and feel satisfied. It is the same in business life because people make a great effort to achieve their position in their career. To reach the goal of the dream job makes people satisfied and distressed because doing the job you want is like doing a hobby, since you are doing it willingly, and it brings self-fulfillment.
So, money is really important for us to continue to live our lives in comfort and we should work to earn it but there are more reasons that are different from earning money. In my opinion, one the most remarkable reasons to work is to make your wish about career come true, and feel satisfaction.