A gangster falls in love

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Can anyone check my grammatical mistakes? Thank you.

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Maari, a gangster falls in love with his partner, Sridevi but he seeks revenge on two policemen after he is accused of smuggling by the duo.

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Maari is a local don and he focuses his attention completely towards pigeon race and almost gets addicted to it. During a clash, Maari transforms into a small time don. When he begins to rule his area, everything seems to be on track for Maari until meets Arjun Kumar, a police officer, decides to put an end to Maari’s dream run. How does Maari handle an intellectual police officer form, Arjun Kumar?
 

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Can anyone check my grammatical mistakes? Thank you.

Short Synopsis
Maari, a gangster, falls in love with his partner, Sridevi, but he seeks revenge on two policemen after he is accused of smuggling by them. [STRIKE]the duo.[/STRIKE]

Long Synopsis
Maari is a local don [STRIKE]and he[/STRIKE] who focuses his attention (almost) completely [STRIKE]towards[/STRIKE] on pigeon racing and almost gets [STRIKE]addicted to[/STRIKE] obsessed with it. [STRIKE]During[/STRIKE] After a clash with a rival, Maari [STRIKE]transforms into[/STRIKE] becomes a small time don. [STRIKE]When he begins to rule his area,[/STRIKE] However, Maari gets his own territory, and everything seems to be on track for him until he meets Arjun Kumar, a police officer, who decides to put an end to Maari’s dream run. How does Maari handle [STRIKE]an[/STRIKE] this intellectual police officer? [STRIKE]form, Arjun Kumar?[/STRIKE]
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- You didn't mention Sridevi in the long synopsis.
- Do you mean that Arjun Kumar is "smart", "clever" or "intelligent", or do you really intend to use "intellectual" to describe him?
 

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Note:
- You didn't mention Sridevi in the long synopsis.
- Do you mean that Arjun Kumar is "smart", "clever" or "intelligent", or do you really intend to use "intellectual" to describe him?

Two things,

- Yes, you’re right. At the same time, I did mention two policemen in a short synopsis, but didn’t in the long, just spotted. Ok, lesson learned.
- Since he’s playing a police officer character, he is extremely smart in this movie. So, I decided to define him as “intellectual”.

Revised as below:
Maria, a local don who has his own territory, but he seeks revenge on a policeman after he is accused of smuggling by him.
 

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I'm even more confused now!
Is Arjun Kumar the name of an actor or a fictitious character in the film?
Also, who is "Maria?"
 

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I'm even more confused now!
Is Arjun Kumar the name of an actor or a fictitious character in the film?
Also, who is "Maria?"

- Vijay: Plays the role of inspector Arjun Kumar in 'Maari' (a fictitious character in the film)
- Please accept my apologies, teechar! It’s “Maari” not “Maria”. A single spelling mistakes change the whole meaning of the sentence. Today, I realized the spelling of words is very crucial in writing.
 

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Maari, a local don who has his own territory, [STRIKE]but he[/STRIKE] seeks revenge on a policeman after [STRIKE]he[/STRIKE] Maari is accused of smuggling by him.

Use "smart" or "intelligent" instead of "intellectual."
 
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