own94
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- Jan 17, 2016
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- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Russian
- Home Country
- Uzbekistan
- Current Location
- Uzbekistan
Hi, My name is Ameen. I am going to apply for one of the Russian universities and I wrote an essay, could you please check it for me? Specifically content, grammar mistakes and coherence of an essay. i will be looking forward for your response, Thanks in advance!!!
Russia has long been considered as a great country with its hard – working and goal directed people, construction of comprehensive governmental and administrative strong organization to deliver unique image: deep – culture and resilient statehood. As an enthusiastic person, I am intending to study in this blessed country to do my bachelor in the field of “International relations” to learn steps of different spheres that serve for the overall welfare and development of developing countries.
Furthermore, Russia has one of the leading positions in the world’s economy which shows how this country is developed and prosperous. It is not a secret that in developed countries, the chance of making successful career is better than those in developing ones therefore Russia, from my point of view, will be a decent and superb choice by these means. I noted the fact that HSE graduates have a very high rate in getting jobs in many famous and powerful companies in Russia and in many other parts of the world.
However, Uzbekistan is a young country, and as a young person, I purpose to grow and contribute to the base of development: that is risk management, dispute resolution and peace – building. Since Uzbekistan is situated in Central Asia, I have dreamed to learn strategies that make my country developed and helpful to neighbor countries in maximum level to sustain lifelong education, health issues, longevity of people and mainly a peace.
One of the major things which made me get interested in HSE is its dual language education system. Of course, it is very good that students can start their studying in Russian and continue in English and vice versa. However, these kinds of educational systems are very helpful and considerate in order to be able to speak and think in several languages simultaneously
Nevertheless, regarding my extracurricular activities during my life I have been actively engaged in studies and in sports. And from my early age, I was very fond of a variety of sports and I actively engaged in different types such as: Water-Slalom, Water-Polo, Bike-Sport, Judo, Triathlon, and Aikido. However, basically I practiced Aikido. Thereby, many times I have taken participation in various competitions, also I took a part in international seminars from Aikido. In addition to this, several times I acquired honorable places from Water-Slalom, Bike-Sport and got 6-cue from Aikido. In 2006 I became a “Candidate of Master Sports” from Water-Slalom.
To sum up, I can be sure that the study in Russia will help and equip me with the necessary skills to continue to acquire new knowledge and understanding throughout my entire educational life. And I do hope that HSE will acknowledge my interests and will give me an opportunity to study in this high-quality institution.
Russia has long been considered as a great country with its hard – working and goal directed people, construction of comprehensive governmental and administrative strong organization to deliver unique image: deep – culture and resilient statehood. As an enthusiastic person, I am intending to study in this blessed country to do my bachelor in the field of “International relations” to learn steps of different spheres that serve for the overall welfare and development of developing countries.
Furthermore, Russia has one of the leading positions in the world’s economy which shows how this country is developed and prosperous. It is not a secret that in developed countries, the chance of making successful career is better than those in developing ones therefore Russia, from my point of view, will be a decent and superb choice by these means. I noted the fact that HSE graduates have a very high rate in getting jobs in many famous and powerful companies in Russia and in many other parts of the world.
However, Uzbekistan is a young country, and as a young person, I purpose to grow and contribute to the base of development: that is risk management, dispute resolution and peace – building. Since Uzbekistan is situated in Central Asia, I have dreamed to learn strategies that make my country developed and helpful to neighbor countries in maximum level to sustain lifelong education, health issues, longevity of people and mainly a peace.
One of the major things which made me get interested in HSE is its dual language education system. Of course, it is very good that students can start their studying in Russian and continue in English and vice versa. However, these kinds of educational systems are very helpful and considerate in order to be able to speak and think in several languages simultaneously
Nevertheless, regarding my extracurricular activities during my life I have been actively engaged in studies and in sports. And from my early age, I was very fond of a variety of sports and I actively engaged in different types such as: Water-Slalom, Water-Polo, Bike-Sport, Judo, Triathlon, and Aikido. However, basically I practiced Aikido. Thereby, many times I have taken participation in various competitions, also I took a part in international seminars from Aikido. In addition to this, several times I acquired honorable places from Water-Slalom, Bike-Sport and got 6-cue from Aikido. In 2006 I became a “Candidate of Master Sports” from Water-Slalom.
To sum up, I can be sure that the study in Russia will help and equip me with the necessary skills to continue to acquire new knowledge and understanding throughout my entire educational life. And I do hope that HSE will acknowledge my interests and will give me an opportunity to study in this high-quality institution.
