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Would you please correct my grammar and punctuation in the following sentences?

1. A wave of jealously swept through John as he watched his former girlfriend being kissed by another man.
2. Pain swept through my abdomen and I stopped, afraid of getting a heart attack.
3. After the latest scandal, the interior minister has been winkled out.
4. The young boy would go to martial art classes learning how to defend himself, and when he returned home, he would try it out on his brother.
5. Maria tried her hand at painting, singing and ballet, but ended up at playing the piano.
6. She found the atmosphere in the town stultifying; her thoughts circled around the only goal: to move away as soon as possible.
7. I visited an old friend and was in a bad mood when I saw how he mollycoddled his children.
8. After the quarrel, Peter heard his wife in the kitchen slamming the cupboard doors, clinking plates and cutlery, and then a glass was smashed on the floor, making him jerk and wince.
9. The concert was almost cancelled, but the organizers had managed to cobble together a band which did not disappointed the audience.
10. The man was in his thirties, but his face was pale and covered in wrinkles. Beneath the black shabby jacket, his body was shrivelled like in an old man.
 

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Sentence one is good.

For sentence two try:

Pains stabbed at my abdomen....

For sentence three try:

After the latest scandal the interior minister was dismissed.

For sentence four try:

The young boy would go to martial arts classes to learn how to defend himself, and when he returned home he would try the moves out on his brother.
 

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Sentence five. Say:

Maria tried her hand at painting, singing, and ballet, but she ended up playing the piano.
 

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For sentenc six say her thoughts focused on the goal of moving away as soon as soon as possible.
 

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Tarheel,
Thank you for your corrections.

Regarding my sentence No.3, I can tell you that I wanted to use "winkle out", which is BrE phrase and means to make someone leave a place. I do not know if you know this phrase
 

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Tarheel,
Thank you for your corrections.

Regarding my sentence No.3, I can tell you that I wanted to use "winkle out", which is BrE phrase and means to make someone leave a place. I do not know if you know this phrase

No, I am unfamiliar with that one. Does it mean the same thing as "dismissed"?

(The extra "as soon" was, of course, a typo. (post #4))
 

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Sentence seven. Perhaps:

I visited an old friend, and it put me in a bad mood when I saw how he mollycoddled his children.
 

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For sentence eight "clunking" doesn't work for me. How about banging pots and pans?
 

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Longman dictionary has this example: Government critics were wrinkled out of their positions of influence.

I am not sure if "wrinkle out" and "dismiss" means the same, but my feeling tells me that I could use it in my sentence. But probably someone who speaks BrE could know the answer.
 

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Regarding No. 8 it was not "clunking", but "clinking". Or do you know some other word I could use instead. This was not pots and pans but plates and cutlery.
 

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Sentence nine. Try:

The concert almost got canceled, but the organizers put together a band that pleased the audience.

Sentence ten (b). Say:

Beneath the shabby black jacket his body was wrinkled like an old prune.
 

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I am wondering why "cobble together a band" could not be used in my sentence.
 

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Regarding No. 8 it was not "clunking", but "clinking". Or do you know some other word I could use instead. This was not pots and pans but plates and cutlery.

"Clanking", which is the striking of metal pieces, may work.
 

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Sentence seven. Perhaps:

I visited an old friend, and it put me in a bad mood when I saw how he mollycoddled his children.

was exasperated?
 

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Regarding No. 8 it was not "clunking", but "clinking". Or do you know some other word I could use instead. This was not pots and pans but plates and cutlery.

Sorry, "clunking" was a typo. Wouldn't she make more noise banging the pots and pans? (It's called being passive aggressive.)
 
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