Motivation letter review (Master's degree)

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azzam11

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Good morning,
I am applying for a master's degree and here is my first attempt of motivation letter. I took a lot of clues and hints from any other letters you posted here. Look forward to your revision, thank you.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I wish to apply to the Master of Marketing and sales program at XXX Business School for the 2016 autumn intake.

This program is a solid step towards my future career as a salesman who understands and appreciates science and technology. My ultimate career idea is to hold a management position in Marketing or in sales field in Spain, I appreciate this opportunity to introduce myself at your University and I perceive it as a perfect opportunity to support my application for the Master program in marketing and sales offered by your University.

With my educational background and working experience, I strongly believe that I am suitable candidate for the master.

In 2009, I earned a Bachelor degree with a specialization in Business Administration from faculty of commerce and business administration at XX University in Egypt,
In July 2011 I worked for one and a half year as Human Resources specialist at XXX company, Owned by the XX National Bank and Bank X at Egypt. In April 2013 I started working as sales representative at XX Group (Samsung exclusive agent) at Saudi Arabia.

There are four key reasons why I want to study at this program. First, I selected your program because of its primary focus on marketing and sales with the expectation that students already possess a strong understanding of science. Second, I am highly motivated by the competitive nature of the field I have chosen. I will work hard to achieve my goals and aspirations. To obtain a degree from a Spanish business school will be an honor and if given a chance, I will do my best to succeed. Ms. XX, The Enrollment Officer of the program, has provided me with her thoughts about the program from our conversations, I became excited to learn more about the master. Third, I wish to grow to be a manager who can combine the science of marketing and sales with the market demands and needs. And last, managers at my recent work, encouraged me to study at XXX business school.

There are a lot of reasons to choose XX business school. first, it’s almost the best school that matches my needs. Second, it has a perfect ranking allover Spain, Europe and worldwide. Third, for its General Accreditations, which makes it the first choice for students who are seeking to succeed in their careers. Forth, the partnership agreements that your school has with various huge companies, grants a perfect opportunity to be Successful person. Finally, the program has three main points which are effective in this career: general knowledge about required skills and market needs, developing management skills for students and finally provide a clear view of the opportunities and risks of the new marketing trends, and to know how to adapt the company to a new competitive environment.

I do not expect this to be easy, nonetheless I am ready and excited for the future. I am very social, creative, ambitious with a sense of responsibility, I think this Master Program will suit my personality completely. Confucius once said: “Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but in rising every time we fall. „
Finally, I am eager to improve my skills and fully prepared to adapt myself to the new working environment and I wish to be one of the famous managers in this field all over the world.

That is why I will do my best to handle all the pressure and demands which are part of completing the academic program.

Thank you for your attention and consideration. I look forward to your acceptance.

Yours sincerely,
XX XX
 
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Dear Sir or Madam,

I wish to apply [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] for the Master of Marketing and Sales program at XXX Business School for the 2016 autumn intake.

This program is a solid step towards my future career as a salesman who understands and appreciates science and technology. My ultimate career [STRIKE]idea[/STRIKE] goal is to hold a management position in marketing or in sales [STRIKE]field[/STRIKE] in Spain. I appreciate this opportunity to introduce myself [STRIKE]at your University and I perceive it as a perfect opportunity[/STRIKE] and to support my application for this program. [STRIKE]e Master program in marketing and sales offered by your University.[/STRIKE]

[STRIKE] With my educational background and working experience, I strongly believe that I am suitable candidate for the master.
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In 2009, I earned a bachelor's degree with a specialization in Business Administration from the Faculty of Commerce and Business Administration at XX University in Egypt, and in July 2011 I got a job [STRIKE]worked for one and a half year[/STRIKE] as Human Resources Specialist at XXX [STRIKE]company,[/STRIKE] which is jointly owned by the XX National Bank and Bank X at Egypt. I worked there for one and a half years, and in April 2013, I started working as a sales representative at the XX Group (Samsung exclusive agent) [STRIKE]at[/STRIKE] in Saudi Arabia.

There are four key reasons why I want to [STRIKE]study at[/STRIKE] enroll in this program. First, I selected your program because of its primary focus on marketing and sales with the expectation that students already possess a strong understanding of science. Second, I am highly motivated by the competitive nature of the field I have chosen. I will work hard to achieve my goals and aspirations. To obtain a degree from a Spanish business school will be an honor, and if given the chance, I will do my best to succeed. Ms. XX, the Enrollment Officer of the program, has also provided me with [STRIKE]her thoughts[/STRIKE] plenty of interesting information about the program [STRIKE]from our conversations, I became excited to learn more about the master.[/STRIKE] Third, I wish to grow to be a manager who can combine the science of marketing and sales with the market demands and needs. And last, [STRIKE]managers at my recent work,[/STRIKE] my senior colleagues and managers have encouraged me to study at XXX Business School.

There are [STRIKE]a lot of[/STRIKE] many reasons for me to choose the XX Business School. First, it’s almost the best school that matches my needs. Second, it has a [STRIKE]perfect ranking allover[/STRIKE] strong reputation and is highly ranked in Spain, Europe and worldwide. [STRIKE]Third, for its General Accreditations, which makes it the first choice for students who are seeking to succeed in their careers.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]Forth[/STRIKE] Third, the partnership agreements that your school has with various [STRIKE]huge[/STRIKE] large companies [STRIKE]grants a[/STRIKE] affords the perfect opportunity to gain valuable practical experience. [STRIKE]be Successful person.[/STRIKE] Finally, the program's content is ideal for preparing aspiring professionals [STRIKE]has three main points which are effective in this career: general knowledge about required skills and market needs, developing management skills for students and finally provide a clear view of the opportunities and risks of the new marketing trends, and to know how to adapt the company to a new[/STRIKE] to succeed in a competitive environment.

I do not expect this to be easy; nonetheless, I am ready and [STRIKE]excited[/STRIKE] fully prepared for the program. [STRIKE]future.[/STRIKE] I am a very social, creative and ambitious individual with a strong sense of responsibility, hence I [STRIKE]think[/STRIKE] believe this master's program will suit my personality perfectly. [STRIKE]completely.[/STRIKE] Confucius once said: “Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but in rising every time we fall." I take that to be my motto in life.

[STRIKE] Finally, I am eager to improve my skills and fully prepared to adapt myself to the new working environment and I wish to be one of the famous managers in this field all over the world.

That is why I will do my best to handle all the pressure and demands which are part of completing the academic program.
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Thank you for your attention and consideration. I look forward to your acceptance.

Yours faithfully, [STRIKE]sincerely,[/STRIKE]

XX XX
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