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    Default Kindly correct this letter...please

    Hi,

    Kindly corrcet the following letter:


    Subject : Increment


    Dear Sir,

    I have been working with Plastic Products Company since 15th May, 2005 and tried to dispose my duties to the best of my ability.

    I hope my sincere efforts have been justified by my obedient and punctual working.

    Now that I have been given additional jobs of following up customers for purchase orders and receivables, I promise and agree to be more responsible in my assignments and in return I request for a reasonable increment in salary.

    Thanking you.

    Yours sincerely.

    Sweetie.

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    Default Re: Kindly correct this letter...please

    and tried to dispose my duties- it should be present perfect- have tried- but why not be a bit more confident- and have performed my duties to the best of my ability.
    I hope my sincere efforts have been justified by my obedient and punctual working.- This sentence doesn't really fit to me- if they have increased your responsibilities, then you have done this
    to be more responsible in my assignments- this suggests you have been less responsible in the past, so try this:
    I accept the greater responsibilities and shall handle them with the same dedication and attention.

    Thanking you in advance, I look forward to hearing from you.

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    Default Re: Kindly correct this letter...please

    Thanks for the reply.

    Sweetie_Sneha.

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