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Bambi31

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Could someone please correct the following text for me?
It's supposed to be my cover letter + description of my past job.

Any help would be appreciated.
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I am applying for a job in your company, because I want to work in a education field and more specifically I want to teach English. I have experience of teaching Japanese in a Japanese language school and I had also taught it numerous times on private lessons. Currently I am working part time in English language school. I am passionate about teaching. Until now I have taught children and adults alike and it was always a pleasure and stimulus for to me to able to convey the intricacies and also the fun and more tricky aspects of the foreigner language to my students. I hope to able to continue my journey of spreading love for foreign languages to many people.
I graduated high school in 2004 and in 2007 I acquired bachelor's degree in Cultural Studies of Far East. In 2011 I entered master studies of Japanese Philology and next year 2012 I got scholarship from MEXT and studied at Ochanomizu Joshi Daigaku for 1 year. After coming back I finished my master studies and in 2015 I graduated with master diploma.
I acquired TOEIC certificate in April 2013 with the score of 885
From 2004 until 2015 I worked as a full time worker in Orion company which produces Christmas ornaments. My main responsibility was managing English-Polish mail correspondence and translating English documents. Once a year when the client came from America to Poland for review of products I was responsible for oral translations. Also, I frequently checked the quality of products in their final stage of development.
 

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I am applying for a job with your company because I I want to work in education, and more specifically I want to teach English.
 

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Second sentence. Say:

I have experience teaching Japanese in a Japanese language school, and I also taught it numerous times in private lessons.
 

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Third sentence. Say:

Currently I am working part time at an English language school.
 

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Next sentence. Perhaps:

I have been teaching children and adults, and I enjoy explaining the intricacies of the language and doing so in a fun way.
 

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Next sentence. Perhaps:

I hope to be able to continue my journey of spreading love of languages to many people.
 

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New paragraph. First sentence. Say:

I graduated high school in 2004, and in 2007 I acquired a bachelor's degree in Cultural Studies of the Far East.
 

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In 2011 I entered master's studies of Japanese Philology, and the next year (2012) I got a scholarship from MEXT and studied at Ochanomizu Joshi Diagaku for one year.
 
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After coming back, I finished my master's studies, and in 2015 I graduated with a master's degree.
 

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I acquired a TOEIC certificate in April 2013 with a score of 885.
 

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Next paragraph. Say:

From 2004 until 2015 I worked at Orion, a company that manufactures Christmas ornaments.
 

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Once a year when the client came from America to Poland for review of products I was responsible for oral translations.
Put a comma after "year" and also after "products".
 
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