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    Default Chasing after my shadow

    Hi, I wonder if the following sentence is correct or acceptable. I hope someone can advise me on this. Thanks. ^^

    The paparazzi is busy chasing after the singer's shadow.

    I know that it should be enough to say 'chasing after somebody'. But in a fiction that I'm writing, I am just trying to use some metaphor to make the writing less boring. If you have other advise, I'll be very happy to learn.

    Thanks!

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    Default Re: Chasing after my shadow

    Hi Morning

    The Paparazzi is busy chasing after the singer's shadow.

    I would suggest altering this becuase it reads in the progressive tense

    It sounds as if you are literally writing the sentence as the events unfold

    I would modify it to read as:

    The paparazzi were busy as they chased after the singer's shadow

    Or:

    The paparazzi were busy, on the tail of the singer's shadow

    Hope this helps

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    Default Re: Chasing after my shadow

    Thank you very much for the suggestions. But how about if I'm trying to say that the paparazzi is always busy doing such things, as this is his daily job? So, can I say it this way.

    The paparazzi is always busy chasing after singers' shadow.

    In fact, I'm curious about your other suggestion. How about if I use it this way?

    The paparazzi is always on the tail of the singers' shadow.

    Many thanks ^^

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    Default Re: Chasing after my shadow

    Hi again

    In response to:

    The paparazzi is always on the tail of the singers' shadow

    I would change two parts

    substite is for are (as paparazzi are a 'body' of photographers) and change the apostraphe to read singer's instead of singers'.

    So it should read:

    The paparazzi are always on the tail of the singer's shadow

    Also- I would refrain from making sentences read progressively, for the reasons outlined in my first post

    Though you can make it read well if you state:

    The paparazzi are alwasys busy, chasing after the singer's shadow

    Again, I hope this helps !

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