This is an assignment, which will, therefore, be graded. It would not be ethical for us to correct it as that way you would be receiving a grade for other people's corrections. We will help by looking at writing, but will not simply correct assignments so that people can improve their grades in ways that their teachers would be unaware of- assignments are meant to be the unaided work of the individual.
As a couple of tips, check the verbs for active voice (arrested), where there should be the passive (was arrested). Also check the forms of the word shoot, which is often used inaccurately- shot is the past tense.
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