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    Individualism is the belief in the primary importance of the individual and in the virtues of self-reliance and personal independence. The foundation of individualism lies in one's moral right to pursue one's own happiness. When pursuing personal goals it requires a large amount of independence, initiative, and self-responsibility. When trying to receive an education it is the single individual that reads the book goes to class and passes or fails the tests. Individualism explains that society is made of a group of individuals. Individualism advocates that each person has his or her own failures and successes that may be influenced by society but it not defined by it. If a man goes out for a job and is denied according to individualism it is his own fault because he was missing whatever the employer needed regardless to wither or not that particular job was in low demand. Individualism is only opposed to man living in society as a non-individual. It does not agree with the person being an unimportant component in society. Individualism states that every person regardless of age race, class or sex has the right to make their own choices and choose their own path. Though individualism is a popular philosophy now it was not always so well accepted.

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    Re: please correct and make suggestions

    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    Individualism is the belief in the primary importance of the individual and in the virtues of self-reliance and personal independence. The foundation of individualism lies in one's moral right to pursue one's own happiness.
    That is good.

    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    When pursuing personal goals it requires a large amount of independence, initiative, and self-responsibility.
    Delete When and it there.

    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    When trying to receive an education it is the single individual that reads the book goes to class and passes or fails the tests.
    Delete single there. You need some punctuation.

    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    Individualism explains that society is made of a group of individuals. Individualism advocates that each person has his or her own failures and successes that may be influenced by society but it not defined by it.
    Say "are not defined by it."

    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    If a man goes out for a job and is denied according to individualism it is his own fault because he was missing whatever the employer needed regardless to wither or not that particular job was in low demand.
    • If a man goes out for a job and is denied that job, according to individualism it is his own fault, because he was missing whatever the employer needed.


    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    Individualism is only opposed to man living in society as a non-individual. It does not agree with the person being an unimportant component in society.
    What does that mean?

    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    Individualism states that every person regardless of age race, class or sex has the right to make their own choices and choose their own path. Though individualism is a popular philosophy now it was not always so well accepted.
    It is popular with those who believe in freedom. It is not popular with those who believe in slavery.

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    Re: please correct and make suggestions

    Quote Originally Posted by kiddx
    Individualism states that every person regardless of age race, class or sex has the right to make their own choices and choose their own path. Though individualism is a popular philosophy now it was not always so well accepted.
    Quote Originally Posted by ronbee
    It is popular with those who believe in freedom. It is not popular with those who believe in slavery.
    It still isn't popular with many and in many places.

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    Certainly, individualism is not popular with those who advocate either socialism or theocracy.

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    I believe many Asian societies tend away from it, including places like Japan.

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