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    Hi, everybody!
    I wrote a paragraph and i'm not sure about the tenses and stuff. Can you help me? What usually happens to me is that after writing something I cannot find mistakes!
    So, here it goes:

    ...In the meantime, I sat still trying to find out what would I say when he came back and in the wink of an eye, I made up my mind. Son, I decided I want him back. Your father and I have been married for twenty-five years and when I think back to what happened during that time, I realize we went through bad moments, yet the happy ones also come to my mind.


    And one more thing: Is it ok to say "Give sb a weekly allowance"? I tried to look up for the verb that goes with allowance, but i couldnt find it!

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    Default Re: I'm not sure about this paragraph, can you help me?

    I'd change 'find out' to 'think'.
    Yes, you can give someone an allowance.

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    Default Re: I'm not sure about this paragraph, can you help me?

    I thought 'find out' was not very good, but I wrote 'think back' a few lines after.

    Thank you for your help! :)

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    Default Re: I'm not sure about this paragraph, can you help me?

    You're welcome. You could also say 'look back over what happened...'

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    Ohhhh, you are right! I haven't considered that expression.
    Thank you! (:

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    Default Re: I'm not sure about this paragraph, can you help me?

    ...In the meantime, I sat still trying to find out what would I say when he came back what i would say when he comes back and in the wink of an eye, I made up my mind. Son, I decided I want him back. Ive decided that I want him back Your father and I have been married for twenty-five years and when I think back to what happened during that time, I realize we went through bad moments, yet the happy ones also come to my mind.

    ..i corrected some of the words you used in your paragraph..
    Last edited by gRacey; 02-Aug-2006 at 13:32. Reason: misspelled words

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