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    please help me correct the grammar in this essay.

    Comparing between Franklin and Jefferson

    Franklin and Jefferson had many things in common. For example, both of them have helped to write the declaration of independence. Also, Franklin has found a university, and Jefferson has, too. Another similarity between Franklin and Jefferson was they were ambassador to France. In addition, Franklin and Jefferson were both important men in American Revolution. Also, Franklin was inventor and philosopher, and so was Jefferson.

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    Default Re: please help me correct the

    Quote Originally Posted by aaa1000
    Comparing between Franklin and Jefferson
    Delete "between" there.

    Quote Originally Posted by aaa1000
    Franklin and Jefferson had many things in common.
    That''s good.

    Quote Originally Posted by aaa1000
    For example, both of them have helped to write the declaration of independence.
    Delete "have" there.

    Quote Originally Posted by aaa1000
    Also, Franklin has found a university, and Jefferson has, too.
    No, you can't use present or present perfect. Use the past tense. Also, the word is founded.

    Quote Originally Posted by aaa1000
    Another similarity between Franklin and Jefferson was they were ambassador to France.
    They were both ambassadors to France.

    Quote Originally Posted by aaa1000
    In addition, Franklin and Jefferson were both important men in American Revolution.
    What's that sentence missing?

    Quote Originally Posted by aaa1000
    Also, Franklin was inventor and philosopher, and so was Jefferson.
    Benjamin Franklin was an inventor and philospher, as was Thomas Jefferson.

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    thank sir ,

    i would appreciate yuor response , it was very helpful .

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