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    I just wrote an compare and contrast essay about the AIDS/ HIV epidemic in south africa and the US. My teacher told me I was headed in the right direction but had to many fragments and I used to many satistic from the article. So I looked over my paper and made corrections and now my paper is a mess. Could someone give me some suggestion or look over my paper and tell how I can improve it. Well here is my essay could someone please help me the is due monday by 11pm.


    Tierra Bailey
    Instructor: Mrs. Dunstan
    Section DW1
    July 21, 2006
    Compare & Contrast Essay #3


    The epidemics of AIDS/ HIV in South Africa and The USA

    What is AIDS: Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome (AIDS)- is a serious, an often-fatal disease to the human immune system that can be transmitted through blood production such as sexual intercourse or contaminated needles. The epidemic of AIDS/ HIV is spread across the globe. This disease has increased the numbers of death each year. However, South Africa and the USA are both struggling to fight against the war of AIDS/ HIV.

    South Africa is experiencing one of greatest AIDS/ HIV epidemic ever. This virus has taking over their country killing and destroying men, women, and children’s lives. The end of 2005, an estimate of five and a half million people who lived with the virus and 600,000 of them were innocent babies. Recent discovery is that there are a new number of AIDS/HIV infections that has dropped in three other countries in Africa. These countries are Kenya, Zimbabwe, and urban areas of Burkina Faso. Nelson Mandela, Bill Gates, and former president Bill Clinton are doing a great duty supporting South Africa fight against AIDS.

    The epidemic of the AIDS/HIV was first identified in the United States of America in 1981. Since the war of AIDS/ HIV has damaged almost every state of America. In 2004, a total of 415,923 people in the US were living with AIDS and only 3,927 were children. To be continued…..

    In South Africa the numbers of orphans living in poverty has increased due to the scourge of AIDS sweeping through their country. As a result, many children have been sexually abused and raped because AIDS has killed their families. Foster care grants are not taken seriously in South Africa. Children wait at least two years before being placed in a stable home. Nevertheless, Anti-retroviral drugs and other medications has been withhold from South Africans. South Africa is fighting to get more sufficient funds to provide better health care to people living with AIDS/ HIV in their country.

    Furthermore, Poverty is a reality in the US. Numbers of poverty of American has grown throughout the recent years. Nearly one out of every eight people is suffers due to poverty in the United States. However, child poverty is a much more serious issue in the US than in South Africa. Poverty among children is 17.8 percent higher than the population as a whole. In 2004, a total of 13 million children lived in poverty in the US. Studies also shows that in America 2,019 babies are born into poverty every 43 seconds.

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    The following passage is comes from my text book-New Horizon College English .I hope it can help you .Good luck!

    Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome (AIDS) was diagnosed in the United States in the late 1970s. Since then, AIDS has killed more than 204,000 Americans - half in the past few years alone. Another 185,000 of the one million infected with the HIV virus are also expected to die.
    Nearly half of those diagnosed with the virus are blacks and Latinos. Women and youth in rural Southern communities now constitute the fastest growing segment of people with AIDS.
    Despite such alarming numbers, the federal and state governments have been slow in implementing programs to stop the spread of AIDS. In place of government inactivity, a number of local organizations have emerged.
    One organization, the South Carolina AIDS Education Network, formed in 1985 to combat the growing number of AIDS cases. Like many local organizations, this organization suffers from a lack of money, forcing it to use its resources creatively. To reach more people in the community, some AIDS educational programs operate out of a beauty shop.
    The owner hands out AIDS information to all her clients when they enter the shop and shows videos on AIDS prevention while they wait for their hair to dry. She also keeps books and other publications around so customers can read them while waiting for their appointments. It's amazing how many people she has educated on the job.
    Recently, the network began helping hair stylists throughout the Southeast set up similar programs in their shops. They are also valuable resources in spreading information to their schools, community groups, and churches.
    The organization has developed several techniques useful to other groups doing similar work. While no one way of winning the war against AIDS exists, the network shares these lessons learned in its battle against AIDS:
    Speak to your community in a way they can hear. Many communities have a low literacy rate, making impossible passing out AIDS literature and expecting people to read it. To solve this problem, ask people in the community who can draw well to create low-literacy AIDS education publications.
    These books use simple, hand-drawn pictures of "sad faces" and "happy faces" to illustrate ways people can prevent AIDS. They also show people who look like those we need to educate, since people can relate more when they see familiar faces and language they can understand. As a result, such books actually have more effect in the communities where they are used than government publications, which cost thousands of dollars more to produce.
    Train teenagers to educate their peers. Because AIDS is spreading fastest among teenagers in the rural South, the stylists have established an "AIDS Busters" program which trains youth from 8 to 26 to go into the community and teach "AIDS 101" to their peers. They make it simple and explain the risk of catching AIDS to friends their own age much better than an adult can. They also play a vital role in helping parents understand the types of peer pressure their children experience.
    Redefine "at risk" to include women from different backgrounds and marriage status. One woman's doctor told her she was not at risk for AIDS because she was married and didn't use drugs. Such misinformation plagues the medical establishment. According to the Centers for Disease Control, women will soon make up 80 percent of those diagnosed with HIV.
    The stylists also emphasize that everyone is at risk and that all of us have a right to protect ourselves - regardless of marriage status.
    These lessons are not the only solutions to the crisis but until there is a cure for AIDS, education represents the only safe measure to guard against the virus.
    Like no other plague before, the AIDS epidemic threatens to wipe out an entire generation and leave another without parents. We must not let cultural, racial, or social barriers distract us from the job that must be done. Nor can we let political inefficiency stop us from our task. This is an undeclared war that everyone must sign up for in order for us to win. We simply cannot let people continue to die because we don't feel comfortable talking about AIDS. Everyone must become an educator and learn to live.

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    It`s a veryinteresting topic.

    What is AIDS?

    You should state the following lines/objectives:

    1. What is AIDS?[ WHAT DOES IT MEAN }
    2.history
    3.its spread all over the world
    4. counselling,treatment and prevention


    AIDS stands for Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome, a wakness in the body`s system that fight diseases.
    AIDS is a serious,often fatal disease of the immune system transmitted through blood products, especially by sexual contact or contaminated needles.
    It stands today as a global epidemic that originated in sub-Saharian Africa during the XXth century. This disease has been increasng the numbers of deaths each year.
    However, both South Africa and the USA are continually struggling against the spread of HIV and AIDS.
    South Africa is experiencing one of the greatest HIV epidemics in the whole world, killing people and destroying both adults` and children`s lives.
    By the end of year 2005, out of an estimated number of 5 and a half million people infected with HIV, 600,000 victims were innocent babies.
    There has been recently discovered that further HIV infections have dropped in other three countries on the African continent : Kenia, Zimbabwe and the urban areas of Burkino Faso.
    Nelson Mandela, Bill Gates and the former president of the USA, Bill Clinton are greatly involved in supporting South African fight against HIV.
    The epidemic virus of HIV was first identified in the USA in 1981. Ever since, the struggle against HIV and AIDS has affected almost every state in the USA.
    In 2004 , a total of 415,923 people in the USA were living with AIDS, of which 3,927 were children.
    In South Africa, the number of orphans living in poverty has increased because of this horrible disease.
    Moreover, many children have sexually abused and raped because Aids had killed their families.


    In addition to that you should state the treatment and also researchers` preoccupation for defeating the disease and mostly the virus which is at the basis of the disease.


    All the best,

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    Quote Originally Posted by shepherd007
    The following passage is comes from my text book-New Horizon College English .I hope it can help you .Good luck!

    Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome (AIDS) was diagnosed in the United States in the late 1970s. Since then, AIDS has killed more than 204,000 Americans - half in the past few years alone. Another 185,000 of the one million infected with the HIV virus are also expected to die.
    Nearly half of those diagnosed with the virus are blacks and Latinos. Women and youth in rural Southern communities now constitute the fastest growing segment of people with AIDS.
    Despite such alarming numbers, the federal and state governments have been slow in implementing programs to stop the spread of AIDS. In place of government inactivity, a number of local organizations have emerged.
    One organization, the South Carolina AIDS Education Network, formed in 1985 to combat the growing number of AIDS cases. Like many local organizations, this organization suffers from a lack of money, forcing it to use its resources creatively. To reach more people in the community, some AIDS educational programs operate out of a beauty shop.
    The owner hands out AIDS information to all her clients when they enter the shop and shows videos on AIDS prevention while they wait for their hair to dry. She also keeps books and other publications around so customers can read them while waiting for their appointments. It's amazing how many people she has educated on the job.
    Recently, the network began helping hair stylists throughout the Southeast set up similar programs in their shops. They are also valuable resources in spreading information to their schools, community groups, and churches.
    The organization has developed several techniques useful to other groups doing similar work. While no one way of winning the war against AIDS exists, the network shares these lessons learned in its battle against AIDS:
    Speak to your community in a way they can hear. Many communities have a low literacy rate, making impossible passing out AIDS literature and expecting people to read it. To solve this problem, ask people in the community who can draw well to create low-literacy AIDS education publications.
    These books use simple, hand-drawn pictures of "sad faces" and "happy faces" to illustrate ways people can prevent AIDS. They also show people who look like those we need to educate, since people can relate more when they see familiar faces and language they can understand. As a result, such books actually have more effect in the communities where they are used than government publications, which cost thousands of dollars more to produce.
    Train teenagers to educate their peers. Because AIDS is spreading fastest among teenagers in the rural South, the stylists have established an "AIDS Busters" program which trains youth from 8 to 26 to go into the community and teach "AIDS 101" to their peers. They make it simple and explain the risk of catching AIDS to friends their own age much better than an adult can. They also play a vital role in helping parents understand the types of peer pressure their children experience.
    Redefine "at risk" to include women from different backgrounds and marriage status. One woman's doctor told her she was not at risk for AIDS because she was married and didn't use drugs. Such misinformation plagues the medical establishment. According to the Centers for Disease Control, women will soon make up 80 percent of those diagnosed with HIV.
    The stylists also emphasize that everyone is at risk and that all of us have a right to protect ourselves - regardless of marriage status.
    These lessons are not the only solutions to the crisis but until there is a cure for AIDS, education represents the only safe measure to guard against the virus.
    Like no other plague before, the AIDS epidemic threatens to wipe out an entire generation and leave another without parents. We must not let cultural, racial, or social barriers distract us from the job that must be done. Nor can we let political inefficiency stop us from our task. This is an undeclared war that everyone must sign up for in order for us to win. We simply cannot let people continue to die because we don't feel comfortable talking about AIDS. Everyone must become an educator and learn to live.
    Thank you so much. You have been a great source of help. Now I can Rewrite my paper. I will be back. Last, do you have and email adress so when i need help on a daily bases I can reach you. I would apperciate your everyday suggestion and advice. Thank you again. Tierra.

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