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    Dear all,

    Would somebody please help me with my English?

    Prescription drugs are prescibed to improved patientsí health. Together with the health benefits, the use of drugs is associated with risk and harm to many people even at therapeutic doses. In Australia, in 1995, more than 20% of hospital adverse events are drug related and 50% of drug related events were judged highly preventable.

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    Dean

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    to improved- to improve
    many people even at- many people, even at
    In Australia, in 1995,- I think you could delte the comma after Australia, which might make it easier on the eye
    drug related- do you see this hyphenated in the literature you read?

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    Thanks tdol,

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    Dean

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    Quote Originally Posted by dean
    Dear all,

    Would somebody please help me with my English?

    Prescription drugs are prescibed to improved patientsí health. Together with the health benefits, the use of drugs is associated with risk and harm to many people even at therapeutic doses. In Australia, in 1995, more than 20% of hospital adverse events are drug related and 50% of drug related events were judged highly preventable.

    Regards,

    Dean
    One more - adverse events were drug related - unless the article was written in 1995!

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