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    Will Phones Kill Letter Writing
    WIth the development in the technology of communication, a large number of new communicative devices come to existence, such as computers, fax machines, cell phones, etc. Among the most widly used devices is telephone.Nowadays people perfer making telephone call to writing letters for writing is considered as a time-consuming work campared with picking up the receiver and talking to it.Convenient as the telephone is, I personally don't think phones will take over writing.
    Firstly, writing is required in some cases.For instance, of you are going to apply for a job, an application letter is a must. This is the best way to show how eager you are to get this job while a phone call won't do wonder for you in this way.Besides application letter, reference letter, recommendation letter and even love letter are all much better than just a call.
    Secondly, although we make telephone call every day , letters are considerd as the major carriage of communication because we would rather go to detail by writing. Moreover, writing materials are thought to be more formal.
    Without doubt, it is true that phones have benefited mankind greatly but it will be quite a long time before phones dominate our daily life of commuciation.

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    Re: Thank you for your correction of my essay

    It's a very good essay, Raiph, except for a few mistakes.

    Nowadays people perfer making telephone call to writing letters for writing is considered as a time-consuming work campared with picking up the receiver and talking to it.Convenient as the telephone is, I personally don't think phones will take over writing.
    Nowadays, people perfer to make phone calls than writing letters as it is considered as wasting-of-time work.The telephone is convenient, I personally don't think phones will replace letters.

    Secondly, although we make telephone call every day ,..
    "telephone calls.."

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    Exclamation Re: Thank you for your correction of my essay

    It's nice.
    i read your essay it is good.
    i request
    can you help me.
    i joined a member of ESL recently, so i dont know how to use this,how did you send your essay me and plese tell what merits are in ESL.

    thank you.
    may i know about you.

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    Question plese tell

    what sentence will come mostly in newspaper.

    how to use future perfect continous sentence?

    pls explain.
    thank you.

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    Re: plese tell

    Hi Saravanan,

    what sentence will come mostly in newspaper.
    how to use future perfect continous sentence?
    I suggest you to post this kind of posts in the 'Ask a teacher' section.

    Future Perfect continuous tense: It is used with will + have + Past Participle
    E.g On this same month next year, I will have been doing this project.

    Hope it helps.

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    Re: Thank you for your correction of my essay

    Quote Originally Posted by Raiph

    Without doubt, it is true that phones have benefited mankind greatly, but it will be quite a long time before phones dominate our daily life of commuciation.
    1. I would add a comma.
    2. Communication.

    I think that this is a good essay.

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    Re: Thank you for your correction of my essay

    Quote Originally Posted by Raiph
    Please check my essay and give an overall comment(bad\so so\good\excellent)
    Will Phones Kill Letter Writing
    WIth the development in the technology of communication, a large number of new communicative devices come to existence, such as computers, fax machines, cell phones, etc. Among the most widly used devices is telephone.
    1. I would rather say: With the development of communication technology, ...
    2. came to existence.
    3. The telephone is among the most widly used devices.

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