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    Default Need editing for one paragraph

    It is a theme from one movie .....if you know this movie....please give me some advices as well....but mainly...please edit the grammas and sentence structure for me ....Please.......
    The following lines are labelld with numbers.......It might be helpful if you want to give me some feedback...Thanks

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    Default Re: Need editing for one paragraph

    Say:
    the children acted like they were bewitched so the judge would believe them if they accused someone of being a witch.
    It would be better if you posted the entire thing on the forum. As it is, individual sections cannot be copied.



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    Default Re: Need editing for one paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
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    the children acted like they were bewitched so the judge would believe them if they accused someone of being a witched

    It would be better if you posted the entire thing on the forum. As it is, individual sections cannot be copied.
    Thanks for your advice........and that is the entire thing..our teacher only asked us to write 8 to 12 sentences.............
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    Default Re: Need editing for one paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by startanewlife View Post
    Thanks for your advice........and that is the entire thing..our teacher only asked us to write 8 to 12 sentences.............
    It wasn't posted on the forum.

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