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    My favourite newspaper is "Express week". This newspaper is published once a week. It consists of thirty absorbing pages. The first pages contain the hard news, articles about the economy of Lithuania and various interviews. If you aren't interested in politics you can find other information in the newspaper. The "Express week" keeps you informed about sport activities and gossip on stars. Also, there are a lot of necessary articles about people's relationship and their behaviuor in different occassions. As well as, the newspaper includes entertainment pages for kids and adults. If you are in a bad mood it will help you to cope with this problem because there are many amusing stories, anecdots and commis. In addition, it includes all the special information to readers, such as weather forecast, television sheldules and various types of advertisements. So, the "Express week" always provides me with the information.

    Thank you for attention!

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    about sport activities- I think 'activities' is unnecessary and would just say 'about sport'
    necessary articles about people's relationship- necessary?/ How about 'useful', etc? Also, it should be 'relationships'
    If you are in a bad mood- comma
    this problem- I would just say 'to help you cope because'
    anecdots- anecdotes
    commis- cartoons?
    special information to readers- useful inofmration, such as the weather forecast..

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    Default Re: Could you check my paragraph, please?(:

    Tdol, Thank you VERY MUCH!
    I appreciate you greatly(:

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    You're welcome, Katik.

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