It needs a bit of editing and tidying up- Mars, Happlife Home;, etc. It covers the ground reasonably, but if you look at the start of paragraphs 2 & 4, they are virtually identical. Also, in paragraph 4, why do you say 'even in the future'? I would also change the last sentence so that you don't end with a direct question. You should be answering questions, so it leaves us with a feeling of incompletion- I'd make it indirect.
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