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    Is the following paragraph correct? Please eidt if it is needed.

    Dear Teacher,

    Is the following paragraph correct? Please eidt if it is needed.

    With reference to the Genious Mixie price, we would like to inform you that the customers are complaining about the high price we are selling at. Currently, the market price for the item has gone down and available @ RS. 1,500/- while we are supplying at RS. 1,600/-.

    Now it is very difficult for us to sell the material unless we reduce the price to RS. 1,500/-. Please advise.

    Sweetie.

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    Re: Is the following paragraph correct? Please eidt if it is needed.

    and it is available

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    Re: Is the following paragraph correct? Please eidt if it is needed.

    Overall, it looks nice, but I would suggest you to use declined, or desended in stead of using gone down. Therefore, your sentence will be the market price for the items have declined and available etc ...
    You'v done a perfect job ...

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    There's nothing wrong at all to me with 'gone down'; I wouldn't use 'decline', which has the idea of getting worse to me, while a falling price is positive to a purchaser.

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    Re: Is the following paragraph correct? Please eidt if it is needed.

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    There's nothing wrong at all to me with 'gone down'; I wouldn't use 'decline', which has the idea of getting worse to me, while a falling price is positive to a purchaser.
    Thanks for the help.

    Margaret

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