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    Note: the assignment requriement is posted at the end of this.
    Note: revised per posts in this thread. - thanks!
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    Year-round Education – The Other School Calendar
    The educational and economic benefits of year-round schooling have been a hot topic for over two decades. While both sides agree that year-round schooling may not answer all of the problems for school districts everywhere, more than 200 districts nationwide have benefited from the program. By definition students on a year-round schedule attend school for the same number of days (180) as students on the traditional nine-month calendar. The major difference is that year-round education (YRE) students have several shorter breaks throughout the year instead of one three-month summer vacation.

    YRE is usually implemented in one of two ways:
    ō Single-Track - all students attend school at the same intervals, they share the same break schedules.
    ō Multi-track – students are assigned different schedules called tracks. The tracks rotate during the year. In a four track school, there would be 3 out of 4 tracks running at any given time.
    Start dates are usually in late July or early August. The scheduled class days/time off can be broken down as follows; 45/15, 60/20 or 90/30. The breaks are commonly referred to as intersessions. Most schools use this time for remedial or accelerated programs.

    There are many benefits to YRE. One positive aspect of this type of schooling is better retention by children. After a short break the children are refreshed and ready to start again without having to review what has been lost over the summer. At traditional schools, teachers spend weeks reviewing to bring children up to pre-summer levels. Children on a year-round calendar learn faster, better and retain more. With shorter breaks, teachers have a much better chance of maintaining their academic skills. Not only do the children come back refreshed and ready to learn but the teachers are refreshed and energetic as well. There's no meltdown in the spring when the three-month summer vacation is about to begin. Better retention results in improved academic performance. Studies have repeatedly shown that American high school students score well below students from other advanced countries in core academic subjects such as mathematics and history. These countries typically require longer instructional days and more of them than most American schools, where the eight-hour-per-day, 180-day-a-year model is standard.

    For many school administrators, the most persuasive argument in favor of YRE is that it offers a cost-effective way of relieving classroom overcrowding. Instead of renting commercial space, portable classrooms or constructing new schools-- administrators can enlarge the capacity of existing facilities by converting them to year- round operation. Implementing a year-round calendar extends the capacity of a school by 33 percent, according to NAYRE (National Association for Year-Round Education.) A year-round schedule makes fuller use of existing facilities, thus eliminating or postponing the need to build additional classrooms. The net effect of such arrangements is to substantially increase the number of students the school can accommodate. Some experts argue that year-round scheduling helps to deter juvenile crime, thus benefiting the entire community. Although juvenile crimes occur throughout the entire calendar year, the school vacation periods and the peak periods of juvenile delinquency are closely related.

    Those who disagree with year-round education may feel their children need that long summer break from school. Childcare may become a concern because it is hard to find baby-sitters at random times during the year and will cost extra money. It can also cause conflict within the family if the children are not on the same schedule. While some are afraid of student and teacher burn-out, others are just afraid of change. Studies show that attitude and attendance both increase when a school is on year-round schedule.

    Change and education go hand in hand. If we aren’t willing to change something to enable our children to succeed, then we’re just setting them up for future failure. It’s time to change our schools to a schedule that makes sense.


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    Prepare to write an argumentation essay about a topic of your choice. It may be a local interest topic, national, or international. Do the research, planning, and preparation thoroughly and early-- argumentation must come from an informed point of view rather than simply stating your initial opinions. Follow the rules of persuasive writing as presented in Chapter 10 of Wyrick.
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    Looks excellent, very well expressed.

    minor changes:

    one three-month summer vacation.

    Children on a year-round calendar

    33 per cent

    burn-out, others

    You might also hyphenate "year-round" throughout - you are inconsistent on this, and insert space between each paragraph - inconsistent here too.

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    [QUOTE=dani6nv;134872]Note: the assignment requriement is posted at the end of this.
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    Year Round Education – The Other School Calendar
    The educational and economic benefits of year round schooling have been a hot topic for over two decades. While both sides agree that year round schooling may not answer all of the problems for school districts everywhere, more than 200 districts nationwide have benefited from the program. By definition students on a year round schedule attend school for the same number of days (180) as students on the traditional nine-month calendar. The major difference is that year round education (YRE) students have several shorter breaks throughout the year instead of one three-moth summer vacation.
    YRE is usually implemented in one of two ways:
    ō Single-Track - all students attend school at the same intervals, they share the same break schedules.
    ō Multi-track – students are assigned different schedules called tracks. The tracks rotate during the year. In a four track school, there would be 3 out of 4 tracks running at any given time.
    Start dates are usually in late July or early August. The scheduled class days/time off can be broken down as follows; 45/15, 60/20 or 90/30. The breaks are commonly referred to as intersessions. Most schools use this time for remedial or accelerated programs.
    [FONT=Garamond][SIZE=3]There are many benefits to YRE. One positive aspect of this type of schooling is better retention by children.
    Otherwise appears fine

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