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    Can anyone help correct my below essay please?Topic: Traffic Accident in Phnom PenhToday people in the world are facing many problems such as new disease, natural disasters, environmental catastrophe and traffic accident. Traffic accidents is one of the serious problems that often happen unintentionally and sometimes this can result in personal injury, property damage or death as well. In Phnom Penh, a lot of people die or injure because of traffic accidents and this problem becomes more and more serious due to many reasons. The first and important reason is caused by drunk drivers. In general, drunk drivers can not control their feeling and they usually drive fast and carelessly. With this action car accidents will happen easily. Another cause is that people do not obey the traffic law. Some people do not care about traffic light. For example, they may go through the streets even though the traffic light is red. In addition to traffic light, in some situations may also cause road accidents such as looking for something in the car, using mobile phone, driving fast at the crowded location or sleeping during driving. Topic:How to acquire EnglishLearning a new language can be difficult because it is not a native language, and people have to learn many skills in order to have better uses of the language. Similarly, learning English is quite difficult. To my experience, I can acquire my English by practicing and learning many skills like reading, writing, speaking and listening. To improve my reading skill, I often read Cambodia Daily or other books that are suitable for my ability, and reading a lot of books can help me remember more new words and improve my reading and speaking as well. Besides reading a lot of books and newspapers, I sometimes listen to English news on radio or TV. I can learn how to pronounce and stress on the difficult words. Moreover, I usually practice doing exercise on Internet. I get to know my grammar by taking tests on internet and try to learn more new grammar lesson that I have never learnt. Practicing new grammar on internet also develop my writing ability. I know how to write and use the right structure and grammar. For speaking skill, I try to speak every day with my friends and colleagues. However, I am still not satisfied with my speaking ability, and I feel like I canít express myself the way I want.

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    Quote Originally Posted by kimhong View Post
    Can anyone help correct my below essay please?Topic: Traffic Accident in Phnom Penh
    Today people in the world are facing many problems such as new diseases, natural disasters, environmental catastrophes and traffic accidents.

    The problems are all plural - you must decline the nouns in the plural form. It is not incorrect to put 'today' first, but it would sound more natural after 'world'. If it is first, it must be followed by a comma.

    Traffic accidents [is] [are] one of [the] [these] serious problems that often happen unintentionally[,] and sometimes [this] [they] can result in personal injury, property damage or [even] death [as well - DELETE].

    Again, remember these are plural traffic accidents. Also, your final clause is not incorrect - I have modified it to emphasise 'death' because it sounds more natural that way.

    In Phnom Penh, a lot of people die or [injure] [are injured] because of traffic accidents and this problem [becomes] [is becoming] more and more serious [due to] [for] many reasons. The first and [most] important reason is caused by - DELETEdrunk drivers. In general, drunk drivers can not control their [feeling] [emotions] and they usually drive fast and carelessly. [With this action] [Because of this] car accidents will - DELETE (should be present tense) happen easily. Another [cause] [reason] is that people do not obey the traffic laws. Some people do not care about traffic lights. For example, they may [go through the streets] [carry on] even though the traffic light is red. In addition to traffic lights, in some situations [people] may also cause road accidents [such as] [by] looking for something in the car, using [a] mobile phone, driving fast at [the] [a] crowded location or sleeping during driving.

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    Also, where are the paragraphs?

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    They wouldn't call them accidents if they were considered intentional.

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