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    AbdullahAhmad is offline Newbie
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    Smile The coconut seller

    Hopefully the short article below could be corrected and edited for errors.
    At the our Botanical Gardens recently I overheard a conversation between a Malay coconut seller and an American tourist.
    The Malay boy wielding a razor sharp parang asked the lady if she wanted to taste coconut water by saying "You cut fruit and drink?''
    "No." replied the lady shaking her head.."How can I possibly do it.I have no skills like you."she added.
    "You cut cut! "replied the Malay boy insisting that she gave a try being new
    to the country.
    "No No No!" replied the tourist nodding her head again.
    "No No No I cut you" said the boy emphatically wanting to help her cut the coconut.
    She misunderstood and ran for her life.
    Is cut the proper word used above
    Last edited by AbdullahAhmad; 09-Dec-2006 at 08:39. Reason: Doubts about proper word being used.

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    Anglika is offline No Longer With Us
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    Re: The coconut seller

    "cut" is fine here.

    Watch your spacing with punctuation - there should be a space following any punctuation mark.

    You are also inconsistent in using punctuation. Read your piece and you will see that you need commas in a number of places. For instance

    "You cut cut! "replied the Malay boy, insisting that she gave a try, being new
    to the country.

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    Re: The coconut seller

    Don't change the word "cut" it would spoil the story!

    BTW. I love your country

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    Re: The coconut seller

    Here are my thoughts:

    At the [delete] our Botanical Gardens recently [insert comma] I overheard a conversation between a Malay coconut seller and an American tourist.

    The Malay boy [insert comma] wielding a razor sharp [razor-sharp] parang [insert comma] asked the lady if she wanted to taste coconut water by saying "You cut fruit and drink?''

    "No."[change full stop to comma] replied the lady [insert comma] shaking her head. "How can I possibly do it [do that]. I have no skills like you."[change full stop to comma] she added.

    "You cut cut! "replied the Malay boy [insert comma] insisting that she gave [insert "it"] a try [insert comma] being new
    to the country.

    "No No No!" replied the tourist [insert comma] nodding [shaking her head] her head again.

    "No No No I cut you" said the boy emphatically [insert comma] wanting to help her cut the coconut.

    She misunderstood and ran for her life.

    Others may disagree, though!

    MrP

    PS: Don't forget to take out all the double spaces, if this piece is to be published.

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    Re: The coconut seller

    The only other suggestion I have is that you delete 'she added'

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