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    #1

    Please correct my paragraph :)

    Life ...
    Life is something that likes a binary tree . To turn left or turn right ? Always having choices , having decisions , any of them will decide your life . But it depends on yourself , someone decides by feelings , someone decides by reason Ö however someone just decides by money.
    Your life is good or bad , or to be something , according to your algorithm . I have these advices for some close friends . Donít use your selfishness , your glacial pragmatism as a function to choose your way.
    Sometimes , I sit alone being afraid of something . Iím not afraid of painfulness , not afraid of blood , but Iím actually afraid of manís heart Ö

    Thanks so much


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    #2

    Re: Please correct my paragraph :)

    I am gonna do my best..but I cant assure you a 100% correct paragraph. A
    Altered parts in red.


    Life ...
    Life is something that looks like a binary tree . To turn left or turn right ? Always having choices , having decisions , any of them will/can decide your life in a bad or good way .

    But it depends on yourself , someone decides by feelings , someone decides by reason Ö however someone just decides by money.
    I think I got what you wanted to say here...but it's not correctly expressed.
    Let's put in this way:
    It depends on yourself, how you decide? by feelings or by some specific reasons? There are some people that only take into account the money and its financial matters.


    Your life is good or bad , or to be something , according to your algorithm (didn't understand this part) .

    I have/give these advices for/to some my close friends . Donít use your selfishness , your glacial pragmatism as a function to choose your way.
    Sometimes , I sit alone being afraid of something . Iím not afraid of painfulness , not afraid of blood , but Iím actually afraid of manís heart Ö

    Thanks so much


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    #3

    Re: Please correct my paragraph :)

    be free to contact me pidr1nhu.yahoo.com.br,
    just change the first . for @ see ya


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    #4

    Re: Please correct my paragraph :)

    Quote Originally Posted by monkeyvu View Post
    Life ...
    Life is something that[delete] likes like a binary tree . To turn left or turn right ? Always having choices , having decisions , any of them will decide your life . But it depends on yourself you. someone Some decide by feelings , someone some decide by reason Ö however someone some just decide by money.
    Your life is could be good or bad , or to [delete] be something , according to your algorithm . I have these advices this advice for some close friends : donít use your selfishness , your glacial pragmatism as a function to choose means of choosing your way.
    Sometimes , I sit alone being afraid of something . Iím not afraid of painfulness pain, not afraid of blood , but Iím actually afraid of manís heart Ö

    Thanks so much

    Also - delete spaces in front of punctuation, keep spaces following punctuation.

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