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    My resume, pls help to correct

    Dear Sir/ Madam
    I,MY NAME, am very glad to get the information of the equipment supervisor you posted when I skim the website, I think I am competent with this postion in comparison with the requirement of your client.
    Pls see the attached then you will get more information about me, I have four-year engineer experiences and two years experiences as an facility Supervisor, and also got some achievement during my work.
    If I am able to meet your comstomer's requirement, Pls contact me thru my Email or MP, Thanks!
    Best regards!
    My NAME


    Personal Informations:
    Name: Birth: Work Experience: 7 Years
    Email:
    H.P 1111111111
    M.P 2222222222

    Work Experiences
    1\From 09/2004 till now:
    Working in ~~~~company, Shanghai, as a facility supervisor report to M.E manager.
    Responsibility:
    1\ Analysis and improvement according to the unplan shutdown issues with TPM, including HVAC, compressor, machine center, test and assembly machines, etc.
    2\ Setup and commissioning new manufacture line, evaluate suppliers according to the
    requirement from engineering department.
    3\ Cost control to ensure all in budget
    4\ Special equipment design and manufacture for some experiments
    5\ Technical Skills Training for staffs


    2\ From 04/2000~ 09/2004 Work in WEIFU, Wuxi as an equipment engineer
    Checkup, acceptance, maintenance and improvement design for the equipments.
    Very familiar with the principle of CNC, PLC, Converter, and some other automatic control elements, also have some maintenance experience of high precision equipments.




    Education Background
    1\ From Sept. 1996 till Jul. 2000 At JiangNan University Major in Mechanical Technics and Equipment Design
    Main Course: Mechanical Manufacture, Electric control and ect.

    Training:
    1\ 2005/9~2005/9 ~~~Management System
    2\ 2005/6~2005/6 FANUC Connection Design Launched by BEIJING FANUC
    3\2003/10~2003/11 JUNKER Electric and mechanical system principle in Germany
    4\ 2002/7~2002/8 Training of the special machine pre-acceptance in Swiss
    5\ 2001/7~2001/8 Principle of FANUC system
    6\ 2001/9~2001/9 Training in SIEMENS automatic department in BeiJing

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    Re: My resume, pls help to correct

    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post

    Re: Equipment Supervisor Post -XYZ company
    Dear Sir/ Madam

    Thank you for the information regarding the above post that you forwarded following my request via your website.

    I believe I meet the competencies outlined by your client for this post. Please find attached CV outlining my qualifications and experience.

    If you feel I meet your customers requirements please contact me either by Email or MP.

    Thank you for your attention


    Yours sincerely
    My NAME


    Personal Information:
    Name: Birth: Work Experience: 7 Years
    Email:
    H.P 1111111111
    M.P 2222222222

    Work Experience
    1\From 09/2004 till present:
    Working in ~~~~company, Shanghai, as a facility supervisor report to the M.E manager.
    Responsibilities:
    1\ Analysis and improvement according to theunplanned shutdown issues with TPM, including HVAC, compressor, machine center, test and assembly machines, etc.
    2\ Setup and commissioning of a new manufacturing line, evaluating suppliers according to the
    requirement from the engineering department.
    3\ Cost control to maintain costs within budget
    4\ Special equipment design and manufacture for a number of experiments
    5\ Technical Skills Training for staffs


    2\ From 04/2000~ 09/2004 Work in WEIFU, Wuxi as an equipment engineer:
    Checkup, acceptance, maintenance and improvement design for equipment.
    Extensive experience with the principle of CNC, PLC, Converter, and other automatic control elements, also acquired maintenance experience of high precision equipment.




    Education Background
    1\ From Sept. 1996 till Jul. 2000 Attended JiangNan University gaining a Major in Mechanical Technics and Equipment Design
    Main Course: Mechanical Manufacture, Electric control and etc.

    Training:
    1\ 2005/9~2005/9 ~~~Management System
    2\ 2005/6~2005/6 FANUC Connection Design Launched by BEIJING FANUC
    3\2003/10~2003/11 JUNKER Electric and mechanical system principle in Germany
    4\ 2002/7~2002/8 Training of the special machine pre-acceptance in Switzerland
    5\ 2001/7~2001/8 Principle of FANUC system
    6\ 2001/9~2001/9 Training in SIEMENS automatic department in BeiJing
    .

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    Re: My resume, pls help to correct

    Thanks a lot,
    but 1\how to understand the usage of 'following' in this sentence, Thank you for the information regarding the above post that you forwarded following my request via your website.
    2\ What is the meaning of abbreviation, CV?
    Best regards!
    Last edited by wuwei; 31-Dec-2006 at 03:10.

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