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    Smile help edit my paragraph please

    How to avoid water pollution along Mekong River


    Mekong River, the longest river in Southeast Asia, is the most important river in Cambodia because both in dry season and rainy season people living along Mekong river use water form the river for cultivation and their daily living. However, if we take a closer look at this, Mekong River is being polluted unknowingly. Therefore, if we want to keep our Mekong River clean, there are many things that we can do to avoid water pollution along Mekong River. The first and most important way to do to avoid water pollution of Mekong River is that people living along the river must know how to use water in a very safe way. For example, they must conserve the water by turning off the tap when running water is not necessary. Moreover, people should not throw or flow household wastes into the river. The second way to do is that people should keep their animals away from the river and make sure that their animals must not be cleaned in the river because animals wastes contains the substances that can pollute the water. The third way to avoid water pollution of Mekong River is that people must use a proper cultivation practice. For instance, they should know how to use the amount of pesticides and chemical fertilizers on their crop land because if they use too much chemical fertilizers and pesticides, these chemical substances will be carried into the river when there is water runoff or flood.

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    Default Re: help edit my paragraph please

    use 'the' with names of rivers, and with 'dry/rainy season'
    water form- from
    water pollution of Mekong River- polluting the Mekong
    the second way to do- the second way is
    must not be cleaned- must not bathe??
    use the amount- correct amount

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    Red face Re: help edit my paragraph please

    Quote Originally Posted by esophea View Post
    How to avoid water pollution along Mekong River


    The Mekong River, the longest river in Southeast Asia, is the most important river in Cambodia because in both the dry season and the rainy season people living along Mekong river use water from the river for cultivation and their daily living. However, if we take a closer look at this, Mekong River is being polluted unknowingly.
    [New Paragrah]
    If we want to keep our Mekong River clean, there are many things that we can do to avoid water pollution along Mekong River. The first and most important method to avoid water pollution of Mekong River is for people living along the river to know how to use water in a very safe way. For example, they must conserve the water by turning off the tap when running water is not necessary. Moreover, people should not throw or flow household wastes into the river. They also need to keep their animals away from the river and stop cleaning their animals/letting their animals bath in the river because animals wastes contain substances which can pollute the water. The third way to avoid water pollution of Mekong River is that people must use a proper cultivation practice. For instance, they should know how to use the amount of pesticides and chemical fertilizers on their crop land, because if they use too many chemical fertilizers and pesticides, these chemical substances will be carried into the river when there are water runoffs or floods.
    hope this helps-you have a good english vocabulary!

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