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    Default short composition

    Hi guys
    This is a composition for 1st-year students. Please edit it for me. Any suggestions to improve the composition are welcome. Thank you very much.

    One evening, Jenny told her mother that she had a toothache. She took her to a dental clinic.

    She was frightened when she was at the clinic. The dentist calmed her by saying, “I’ll give you an injection in the gums. You’ll feel only a little pain.”

    About five minutes after the injection, he asked her to open her month wide. Soon the dentist told Jenny, “Here’s your tooth.” She was surprised as she did not feel any pain.

    Since that day, Jenny is no longer afraid of seeing a dentist.

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    Smile Re: short composition

    Quote Originally Posted by kohyoongliat View Post
    Hi guys
    This is a composition for 1st-year students. Please edit it for me. Any suggestions to improve the composition are welcome. Thank you very much.


    One evening, Jenny told her mother that she had a toothache. Her mother took her to a dental clinic.

    Jenny was frightened when she was at the clinic. The dentist calmed her by saying, “I’ll give you an injection in the gums. You’ll feel only a little pain.”

    About five minutes after the injection, he asked her to open her month wide. Soon the dentist told Jenny, “Here’s your tooth.” She was surprised as she did not feel any pain.

    Since that day, Jenny is no longer afraid of seeing a dentist.
    , I changed the pronouns to ensure clarity-it seemed for a second as if Jenny was taking her mother to the dental clinic.

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