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    esophea is offline Member
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    Angry Edit my Paragraph please

    Why Siem Reap has attracted many international tourists.

    Siem Reap is a province in Cambodia, has attracted many international tourists every year. It has many interesting places for tourists such as Angkor area, Cultural village, Kulen mountain and so on. People like to visit these places very much, especially Angkor Wat, which is located in Angkor area in Siem Reap. Angkor Wat is a very famous temple in the world. In addition, tourists can spend less money than other countries. Comparing to most countries in the world, hotels in Siem Reap provide very good services with a lower price. Food is even cheaper because tourists can spend less than 10 dollars per day. Another reason that attracts many foreigners is the security. Nowadays, Siem Reap is safer than before because many police officers are working very hard to keep the province safer. At night, they can go any where without being frightened. In short, I believe that Siem Reap is the most interesting place in the Cambodia that can attract millions of tourists every year.

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    Tdol is offline Editor, UsingEnglish.com
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    Default Re: Edit my Paragraph please

    Siem Reap is a province in Cambodia that attracts many international tourists every year.
    such as Angkor area- such as the Angkor Park
    is a very famous temple in the world- is one of the most famous temples...
    In addition, tourists can spend less money than other countries.- In addition- in addition to what? I'd say 'Furthermore'
    Comparing to most countries- Compared
    good services with a lower price- at/for
    to keep the province safer- safe
    any where- anywhere

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