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    Cool FCE writing (exam practice)

    Here is a question for FCE writing and my answer to this question. Could you possible check it, correct if it is necessary and give your advice about the letter.

    Dear Kate,

    How are you? Iím sorry I havenít written for so long, but I was very busy after coming back from my summer holiday in Turkey.

    I got back last week, and I had really enjoyed my holiday, because the hotel was very beautiful, specious and close to the sea. It took me just 5 minutes to get from my room to the beach, which was long, wide and covered with soft sand. Excellent! The sea was clean and wonderful for swimming.

    Unfortunately, not everything was good. The worst thing is that the food was plain and cold drinks werenít available by the swimming pools at any time. The staff couldnít talk in English at all and nightlife was boring. It doesnít really matter, because I spent two fascinating weeks by the sea, got a good tan and rested well.

    Well, write to me again soon and tell me all your news. Please give my regards to your parents.


    Best wishes,
    Peter.


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    I was very busy - maybe use the present perfect
    specious- spelling
    covered with soft sand- could you rephrase this? It sounds a bit weak to me- most beaches are covered with sand, so you could rephrase it to emphasise the softness
    The worst thing is -tense
    and nightlife- article missing
    It doesn’t really matter- Tense, and how about something like 'However'?

    For FCE, this seems fine.

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    Default Re: FCE writing (exam practice)

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    I was very busy - maybe use the present perfect
    specious- spelling
    covered with soft sand- could you rephrase this? It sounds a bit weak to me- most beaches are covered with sand, so you could rephrase it to emphasise the softness
    The worst thing is -tense
    and nightlife- article missing
    It doesnít really matter- Tense, and how about something like 'However'?

    For FCE, this seems fine.
    Iíve revised my letter according to your remarks. Could you possible take a quick look at this and say what you think about this? Are there any mistakes in the letter?

    Dear Kate,

    How are you? Iím sorry I havenít written for so long, but Iíve been very busy after coming back from my summer holiday in Turkey.

    I got back last week, and I had really enjoyed my holiday, because the hotel was very beautiful, spacious and close to the sea. It took me just 5 minutes to get from my room to the beach, which was long, wide and covered with soft sand. Excellent! The sea was clean and wonderful for swimming.

    Unfortunately, not everything was good. The worst thing was that the food was plain and cold drinks werenít available by the swimming pools at any time. The staff couldnít talk in English at all and the nightlife was boring. It didnít really matter, though, because I spent two fascinating weeks by the sea, got a good tan and rested well.

    Well, write to me again soon and tell me all your news. Please give my regards to your parents.


    Best wishes,
    Peter.


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    Default Re: FCE writing (exam practice)

    after coming back- I'd use 'since coming back'

    The rest is fine

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    Default Re: FCE writing (exam practice)

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    after coming back- I'd use 'since coming back'

    The rest is fine
    Thank you again.

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