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    nataliexfaye is offline Newbie
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    Julius Caesar being both a brilliant statesman and a tyrant had very powerful political positions. Caesar’s father was Gaius Julius Caesar, who became a Roman Senator, and His mother was Aurelia Cotta who’s father and grandfather were both consuls. Caesar being in such a prestigious family grew up to follow in his families footsteps. Caesar’s military career was very successful as historians call him one of the greatest military strategists and tacticians who have ever lived. Caesar was part of the civil war which started when he crossed the river Rubicon and the results of the war led to even more power. Caesar’s claims to power eventually led the tension between the senate to his own assassination.

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    pleaseeee someone correct it i need it soon!

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    Default Re: please correct my intro to my essay techers!!!

    had very powerful political positions- held
    His mother- his
    who’s father- whose
    Caesar being in such a prestigious family grew up to follow in his families footsteps.- rephrase whole sentence
    was very successful as historians call him one of the greatest military strategists and tacticians who have ever lived- punctuation and subject/verb agreement error
    Caesar was part of the civil war- change verb
    the results of the war led to even more power- who got the power?
    eventually led the tension between the senate to his own assassination- conjunction missing

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