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    xosweetyxo33 is offline Newbie
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    In Bridge to Terabithia Jesse Aarons learns numerous lessons from Leslie Burke. Jess learns to live life to open to possibilities. He learns to always look on the bright side of things, to live life to the fullest and that the world is a jungle just waiting to be explored. From Leslie he is taught not to care what people think of you, it’s what you think of yourself that counts. Without Leslie teaching him these valuable lessons he wouldn’t have learned to cherish chances he may have in life.

    Jesse finds all different types of strengths in himself and other people. Throughout the book Jesse starts to learn he can be brave sometimes, is imaginative and creative. He learns he is a loyal friend, loving and thoughtful. He finds that Leslie’s strengths are to be courageous and adventurous. Leslie was smart, very creative, an optimist, and determined.

    One value Jesse develops towards the end of the story is his family. He comes to treasure the friendship he had with Leslie, and May Belle. From these things he favors he learns that there are no second chances to life so he might as well make the best of it now. At the end of the book Jess comes to believe Terabithia is a place where he can be himself. He also learns that by preserving Terabithia, he would always have a part of Leslie with him.







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    In Bridge to Terabithia Jesse Aarons- comma and italicise the title
    Jess learns to live life to open to possibilities- punctuation
    From Leslie he is taught - use 'learns'; otherwise, it doesn't go with the preposition
    Without Leslie teaching him these valuable lessons he wouldn’t have learned- punctuation
    Throughout the book Jesse starts- throughout + starts are illogical to me
    One value Jesse develops towards the end of the story is his family.- Is a family a value and do, you develop it?
    From these things he favors he learns- punctuation

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    thanks i understand what you means i fixed that sentence a long time ago someone told me 2 i didnt updat it i 4got but thank u anyway

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