The night was pretty quiet, however, it- either put a full-stop or a semi-colon before 'however'
around The street- punctuation
nothing terribly in it- unclear meaning and it shouldn't be an adverb
scared stiff however,- repeat mistake with 'however'
I was hidden- I hid
to the event- scene
Even I had- I even had
realised that one man is missing..- tense and use three dots
the story came to the end- did it? How about 'that was all I remember'
by night- preposition
I had to faint- I had fainted
explosion they did- delete 'they did'