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    The Hutchence family eventually returned to Sydney in Michael's late teens, and it was there that Hutchence befriended Andrew Farriss at Davidson High School on Sydney's Northern Beaches. Shortly, Michael and Andrew joined with Andrew's brothers Tim and Jon, as well as friends Garry Gary Beers and Kirk Pengilly to form their first band, The Farriss Brothers which would ultimately become INXS.

    Can we rewrite the highlighted part as 'which later ultimately became INXS' or 'which later was ultimately to become INXS'?

    Does the original version sound better than mine?

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    I am afraid so.

    "later" is not needed in this context, with "ultimately" already in the sentence. Either one or other, but not both.

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    Default Re: rewriting a sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    I am afraid so.

    "later" is not needed in this context, with "ultimately" already in the sentence. Either one or other, but not both.
    Thank you for your correction.
    I also would like to know if 'which ultimately/later became INXS and 'which was ultimately to become INXS' are equivalent to the original version 'which would ultimately become INXS'.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    Yes
    Thanx!

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