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    Angry Please edit my paragraphs

    Topic: with the help of technology, students learn more information and learn it faster.

    In this recent decade, the advanced computing and telecommunications technology is constantly affecting education industry. Through the use of technology, comparing to the past 10 years, learning can be far different. The process of learning becomes faster and effectively as students have access to new different types of information, numerous explanations, and variety types of experiments in ways that have never been possible before. Similarly, instead of reading books at home, school, and library, students can use technology to conduct lessons, homework and assignments, and find thousands of research studies to enhance their learning process. Indeed, students can learn more information and learn it faster because of two main technological discoveries.
    The most beneficial discovery for the last decade that strongly pushes students to get more information and learn it faster is the Internet. Internet, which most people consider as the E-libraries and the source of information, provides students with many different advantages. Students can get more resources or handouts, take E-learning course, practice thousands of online exercises and send or share documents with their friends both locally and internationally. With these achievements, Students have more opportunities to know everything they want by just a simple click instead of looking for different books. For example, if having assignment, they do not need to spend much time looking for books relating to their assignment in the library or elsewhere. Simply, they just spend two or three hours with Internet searching what they want. With the use of the Internet, the abilities to learn and understand things are faster than without the Internet.
    Another important discovery is technological devices. Currently, technological devices such as Computer, PDA, Mobile phone, Electronic Dictionary, Tape Recorder, Digital Camera… so on, are considered to be the significant things that enhance students learning as well. These products can help them to store, edit, copy, delete and record information or activities in class and they can keep it for long time without being fragile. For instance, students can use tape or MP3 recorder to record lecturer’s presentation or activities.

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    Re: Please edit my paragraphs

    Quote Originally Posted by esophea View Post
    Topic: with the help of technology, students learn more information and learn it faster.

    In this recent decade, the advanced computing and telecommunications technology is constantly affecting the educational industry. Through the use of cutting-edge technology, comparing to the past 10 years, learning can be far different. (or: The advent of technology has entailed a remarkable change for the better in the process of learning). The process of learning becomes (has become) faster and effectively (more effective) as students have access to new different types of information, numerous explanations, and a great variety (types) of experiments in ways that have never been possible before. Similarly, instead of reading books at home, school, and library, students can use technology to conduct lessons, do homework and other assignments, and find thousands of research studies to enhance their learning process. Indeed, students can learn more information and learn it faster because of (owing to??) two main technological discoveries.

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    The most beneficial discovery for the last decade that strongly pushes students toward getting more information and learning (it) faster is the Internet. Internet, which most people consider as the Ee-libraries and the (an outstanding) source of information, provides (presents) students with many different advantages. Students can get more resources or handouts, take E-learning course, practice thousands ('hosts' sounds better, avoid repeating 'thousands') of online exercises and send or share documents with their friends both locally and internationally. With (Owing to) these achievements, Students have more opportunities to know everything they want by just a simple click instead of looking for different books. For example, if having (in the event of an) assignment, they do not need to spend much time looking for books relating (related) to their assignment in the library or elsewhere. Simply, they just (only) spend two or three hours with Internet searching (surfing on-line for) what they want. With the use of the Internet, the abilities to learn and understand things are faster than without the Internet. (Also, by using the Internet, our ability to understand things develops faster.)

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    Another important discovery is the technological devices. Currently, technological devices such as Computer, PDA, Mobile phone, Electronic Dictionary, Tape Recorder, Digital Camera… so on, are considered to be the significant things that enhance (use 'bolster' here, avoid repeating 'enhance', vary your vocabulary) students' learning as well. These products can help them (to) store, edit, copy, delete and record information or activities in class and they can keep (be kept) it for a long time without being (becoming) fragile. For instance, students can use a tape or an MP3 recorder to record lecturer’s presentation or other activities.
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