It needs a lot of work. There are many words (nottingham, german) that need capital letters. There are terms like 'maybe' that should be replaced and abbreviations like 'cause' that should be written in full. It's supposed to be a motivation letter, but the part about culture shock comes across as negative to me. It needs to be sell-checked to get rid of typos like 'differnet'. The punctuation needs looking at- what's the comma doing in the first sentence?