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Oversea studies have several advantages and disadvantages. At first, I will start by describing the advantages. When we study abroad, we can practice a great many skills such as speaking, listening and so on. It is a good starting point to improve one's foreign languages. For example, when one goes to study in the USA or in England, one can practice speaking English with native speakers and can therefore receive the right accent for any words.
Furthermore, being exposed to the language in a natural way helps boost one's self-confidence and start a life on one's own, away from family and friends and amidst English-speaking people.Not to mention that this entails a better familiarity with and knowledge of other cultures, by making new acquaintances and friends.
On the other hand, studying abroad has its inconveniences as well. One of them would be having to spend a lot of money. If we get this money to study in our own country, we will save a lot of money because school or university fee is cheaper there than abroad. One other inconvenience is the difficulty of getting in touch with family. For instance, when we study in our own country, we can meet our parents every time we come back from school or university. Third, adjusting to a new environment such as weather, living or culture, to say the least, may pose serious obstacles. For example, when you live in your own country like Asia, you are used to its weather all right, but aclimatizing to weather conditions with temperature extremes in foreign countries such as the USA may be tough. Last, living in a totally new place may also be confusing to begin with, because you don't know all the places that you want to go to. Particularly difficult is relating to and communicating with complete strangers.
Having said all this, one can argue that studying abroad is both a struggle and an invigorating experience.