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    plz check request

    10.1. You tell to your friend about the recent travel to the country, which language study:
    1) as you have reached to a place of your purpose, you used what transport;
    2) as long you there were also what was the purpose of travel;
    3) your goals of travel.........................................
    I just returned from my trip to India was there on summer at my p friend’s invitation. john did his best to make my staying at their home pleasant john ‘s family was very hospitable and his younger brother jigs had a very good sense of humor people of India are some of the friendliest and most welcoming people I know wanted to see India as much as possible. There are many interesting and magnificent places to see. As I am interesting history we decided to go around Delhi. We took metro and we rent a car to make our trip easier and comfortable we gone to some interest places. One of the most beautiful ancient buildings is the red fort. It’s beautifully built with red marbles. it was made by the mughals who ruled India. In Delhi you also find a number of temples, the most beautiful of which is the lotus temple which is of the shape of a lotus. Also, there are lots museum which tells you about the ancient India like national museum. There are also many universities and educational institution in Delhi. We went on mountain climbing on Nanda Mountains. And when you’re hungry, there are plenty of restaurant, at all prices, serving you every possible type of cuisine’s hope to visit the city sooner and see this wonderful beauty again.

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    Re: plz check request

    Dear Guy,

    here is my correction to your passage. you can see the red color for making this correction in addition to some deletions should be made here please note them comparing to your passage:

    10.1. You tell your friend about your recent travel to the country, to which you are going to study language :
    1) as you have reached to a place required of your purpose, what transport means do you use there ?
    2) what is your purpose of travel;
    3) your goals of travel.........................................
    I have just returned from my trip to India, on behalf of my summer friend’s invitation. John did his best to make my staying at their home pleasant. John‘s family was very hospitable and his younger brother Jigs had a very good sense of humor.Indian People are most friendly and welcomed people Also, there are a lot of interesting and magnificent Indian places to visit.
    As I am interested in history we decided to go around Delhi. We took metro , then, rent a car to make our trip easier and more comfortable. we visited some interesting places. One of the most beautiful ancient buildings was the red fort. It was beautifully built with red marbles. it was made by the mughals who ruled India.
    In Delhi, you can also find out a number of temples, the most beautiful , which is the lotus temple shaping like a lotus. Also, there are lots of museums which sound us about the ancient ruins of India like the national museum. There are also many universities and educational institutions in Delhi. We climbed mountain called Nanda Mountains.
    There are plenty of restaurants of different prices and good service ,

    In short, it is very beautiful city and hope to visit it in the near future

    This is not the final correction, may be othere have a different point of view regarding it.

    With regards

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