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    Question "Don't go to any bother" and other stuff

    Hi all,

    How you like the below passage?

    "There are two issues concerning your piece I need to comment on. First, it is little too long, but I think it may be split into two pieces that would be published separately, so please don't go to any bother on this account at the moment: we will take care of it once, and if, the article is finally accepted. Second, most importantly, you miss a point when you refer to John Smith's (1900) paper, who did not, as you suggest, fully discuss the problem you work on, but who, at least in my opinion, simply gave basic notions of the problem and pointed out that it needed further work on."

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    Default Re: "Don't go to any bother" and other stuff

    Quote Originally Posted by nyggus View Post
    Hi all,

    How you like the below passage?

    "There are two issues concerning your piece I need to comment on. First, it is little too long, but I think it may be split into two pieces that would be published separately, so please don't go to any bother on this account at the moment: we will take care of it once, and if, the article is finally accepted. Second, most importantly, you miss a point when you refer to John Smith's (1900) paper, who did not, as you suggest, fully discuss the problem you work on, but who, at least in my opinion, simply gave basic notions of the problem and pointed out that it needed further work on."

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    Is it yours or your teacher's? It's a bit wordy, but mostly OK.

    In the second line, 'could/might' would work better, though 'would' might be OK - if what the writer means is that he's certain that they would be published. The second sentence is too long - he's thinking as he writes, pausing for a sip of coffee between thoughts, and sticking a comma in. But it's grammatical and makes sense until it gets to the last clause, which should be '... it needed further work' (or, more colloquially, '... it needed further work on it').

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    Default Re: "Don't go to any bother" and other stuff

    Quote Originally Posted by BobK View Post
    Is it yours or your teacher's? It's a bit wordy, but mostly OK.
    Indeed it looks, at least in some places, like written by a teacher! But it's mine, actually, and not written for a student. I used this "work on" quite often, but will never do it again! Thanks, BobK.

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    Re-reading, I spotted a slip: it should be 'it is a little too long'.

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    Default Re: "Don't go to any bother" and other stuff

    Quote Originally Posted by BobK View Post

    Re-reading, I spotted a slip: it should be 'it is a little too long'.

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    Indeed, it should. A funny thing is, it was there at the very beginning, but revising I did remove it - don't ask my why. Too much of revising may sometimes end in failure...

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