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    proofreading

    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text (especially the highlighted parts):

    When executing a task, employees are to do a job that is meaningful even for them, in which they can make use of their strengths and thus find success and self-fulfilment. However, the fact that the meaning cannot be given or created, but that everyone has to find it himself for the most part is often overlooked.

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka

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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Hanka View Post
    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text (especially the highlighted parts):

    When executing (or: carrying out) a task, employees are (expected) to do a job that is meaningful even for themselves, a job in which they can make use of their own strengths and thus (find) achieve success and self-fulfilment. However, the fact that the meaning cannot either be given or created, but that everyone has to find it (himself) by themselves, is often overlooked. (for the most part - redundant)

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka
    here are my suggestions
    the highlighted parts are OK, except for the redundant one at the end
    bianca

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    Re: proofreading

    Thanks a lot!

    The phrase "for the most part" refers to "finding the meaning". Everyone has to find the meaning by themselves mostly.

    Could "mostly" be used and where in the sentence? Thank you.

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    Re: proofreading

    I'd say:

    However, the fact that the meaning cannot either be given or created, but has for the most part to be found by each and everyone, is often overlooked.

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    Re: proofreading

    Great! Thanks a lot!!!!!!!

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    Re: proofreading

    You're welcome!

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