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    proofreading

    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text:

    We have experienced many times that the date proposed by us was neither met nor confirmed nor changed by you, that the invoices were not paid and the goods were prepared uselessly.
    I would hereby like to ask you to consider the above-mentioned facts so that the business relationship between our firms could continue the same way as recently.

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka
    Last edited by Hanka; 03-Jul-2007 at 14:57.

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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Hanka View Post
    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text:

    We have many a time experienced that the date proposed by us was neither met, nor confirmed or changed by you, that the invoices were not paid and the goods were prepared uselessly (carelessly??).
    I hereby would like to ask you to accomodate the above-mentioned inconveniences so that the business relationship between our firms will continue as before / as usual.

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka
    I replaced 'consider' with accomodate (= consider, deal with) - inconveniences. 'Facts' just doesn't sound right to me.
    Last edited by bianca; 03-Jul-2007 at 15:34.


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    Thank you very much! Uselessly = that thay did not have to prepare the goods because the other firm did not come to collect it

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    prepared in vain? to no avail?


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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Hanka View Post
    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text:

    We have experienced many times that the date proposed by us was neither met nor confirmed nor changed by you, that the invoices were not paid and the goods were prepared uselessly.
    I would hereby like to ask you to consider the above-mentioned facts so that the business relationship between our firms could continue the same way as recently.

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka
    On many occasions the date we specified for delivery was not met, and no alternative dates were suggested. As a result we have been unable to fulfil orders and have not been able to invoice our customers.
    I would appreciate it if you will consider these problems and how to resolve them so that our companies can continue to do business in the future.

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