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    Question A passage

    "What a cold, unpleasant and unlucky day it was! Not only was it raining, not only was the wind downright strong, but also my dog ate my cat. Total disaster. I wasn't able to think about anything except this poor little creature, the cat my mother had bought me two years ago for my birthday. Poor, poor thing, ate by another friend of mine. What a nightmarish, sad end. Oh dear, what should I think of it?"

    Is this passage correct?

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    Default Re: A passage

    I would only change one thing. (See below.)

    Quote Originally Posted by nyggus View Post
    "What a cold, unpleasant and unlucky day it was! Not only was it raining, not only was the wind downright strong, but also my dog ate my cat. Total disaster. I wasn't able to think about anything except this poor little creature, the cat my mother had bought me two years ago for my birthday. Poor, poor thing, eaten by another friend of mine. What a nightmarish, sad end. Oh dear, what should I think of it?"
    You might put an EM* after Total disaster, so: Total disaster!

    ~R

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    Last edited by RonBee; 03-Aug-2007 at 12:32. Reason: spelling

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    Quote Originally Posted by nyggus View Post
    "What a cold, unpleasant and unlucky day it was! Not only was it raining, not only was the wind downright strong, but also my dog ate my cat. Total disaster. I wasn't able to think about anything except this poor little creature, the cat my mother had bought me two years ago for my birthday. Poor, poor thing, eaten by another friend of mine. What a nightmarish, sad end. Oh dear, what should I think of it?"

    Is this passage correct?

    Thanks,
    Nyggus
    Poor moggy!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    Poor moggy!
    Well, had it been a Persian cat, the dinner would have been much more sumptuous! But, as the poet said, tears would have been the same...

    Nyggus

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    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    Poor moggy!
    Is "moggy" a BE word for "cat"?

    ~R

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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    Is "moggy" a BE word for "cat"?

    ~R
    From CALD:
    moggy UK INFORMAL: a cat, especially one which is ordinary or has an untidy appearance

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    Quote Originally Posted by nyggus View Post
    From CALD:
    moggy UK INFORMAL: a cat, especially one which is ordinary or has an untidy appearance
    Thanks!

    I like your story. It's funny!

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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    Thanks!

    I like your story. It's funny!
    Many thanks! Am not pretending to be a famous write, just described what happed yesterday...

    Nyggus

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