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    Can someone please give me advice and rate this compostion I wrote. I had to write between 200 and 250 words on this title. 50 marks are alloted in total for the compostion. I thank you in advance.



    Is Art a Waste of Time?
    Is Art a waste of time? The answer is defenitly No, the problem is if does every body apprisate it.

    When we say Art you always thing about paintings and sculptures, but Art is much far from that, it is what we call creativity. Every body have some Art in him without realize, some can express it and some don’t

    We use Art in everything, when we décor our houses, our cars, how we dress, how we talk, in every think. Even in food, a lot of chefs use Art to décor their dishes.

    Since the early ages mankind has used Art to express himself. At first people had used symbols and designs to write, later it became letters, which we still use today. We also have Art in Religion, people has created status in many different positions to represent our Saints.

    However if you are a little bit brave you can use Art in your business, with some imagination and some creativity, you can sell your product on a different way, to make your product different from others.

    That what Art is, when you use something to create something. As we could see Art is not a waste of time. With Art our life is much more colourfull.

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    Default Re: Composition Advice

    Questions.


    Quote Originally Posted by nunudada View Post

    Is Art a Waste of Time?



    Is Art a waste of time? The answer is defenitly No, the problem is if does every body apprisate it.
    Are there any spelling problems there? How might you rephrase that last sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by nunudada View Post
    When we say Art you always thing about paintings and sculptures, but Art is much far from that, it is what we call creativity. Every body have some Art in him without realize, some can express it and some don’t

    Look for punctuation problems, spelling errors, and ways to rephrase things.

    Quote Originally Posted by nunudada View Post
    We use Art in everything, when we décor our houses, our cars, how we dress, how we talk, in every think. Even in food, a lot of chefs use Art to décor their dishes.
    We use art in everything. We use art when we decorate our houses. We express ourselves artistically in our choice of automobiles. We use art in the way we dress, in the way we talk, in everything.

    Quote Originally Posted by nunudada View Post
    Since the early ages mankind has used Art to express himself. At first people had used symbols and designs to write, later it became letters, which we still use today. We also have Art in Religion, people has created status in many different positions to represent our Saints.

    Problems with punctuation, capitalization, and noun/verb agreement.

    Quote Originally Posted by nunudada View Post
    However if you are a little bit brave you can use Art in your business, with some imagination and some creativity, you can sell your product on a different way, to make your product different from others.

    By being artistic?


    Quote Originally Posted by nunudada View Post
    That what Art is, when you use something to create something. As we could see Art is not a waste of time. With Art our life is much more colourfull.

    Look for ways to rephrase things.

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    Last edited by RonBee; 28-Aug-2007 at 01:32. Reason: fix one of the quotes

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    Default Re: Composition Advice

    Good bits of advice Ron!

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