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    Dear teachers,

    I'm kind of in a hurry and need your help right now. I am going to teach kids pronunciation, and I've written some simple verses to help them learn and memorize. Would you pls revise and correct bad verses. Thank you very much in advance.



    1.
    A bee sleeps in a tree,
    And we sleep on a seat.


    2.
    I meet her at the beach,
    We drink tea, speak Chinese.


    3.
    Sixty pigs, sexy Dick,
    Sit together with my Nick.


    4.
    Saturday and Sunday are play days,
    I hope they arenít rainy days.


    5.
    Go ahead, rock your head.
    Share me with your happy thread.


    6.
    Big fat cat, big bad cat,
    Are you on the top of map?


    7.
    I sat on an apple pie,
    Looking at a butterfly.


    8.
    Father wants to wash a car,
    But the weatherís hot hot hot.
    Mother wants to watch a clock,
    And the clock says wa-wa-what.


    9.
    Itís twelve at noon,
    Time for soup.
    Itís two to two,
    Time for fruit.


    10.
    I hate to look
    At grammar book,
    Could you cook it
    As a food.


    11.
    Hello, Mr. Window,
    Do you see my fellow?
    Hello, Mrs. Widow,
    Heís lying on a pillow.


    12.
    I bought a ball in a mall,
    I saw a daughter play in fall.


    13.
    Father and mother,
    Bother my brother.
    Teacher called Peter,
    Flirt me in winter.


    14.
    Iím about to walk along,
    and Iím afraid to be alone.


    15.
    Up up umbrella,
    Cup cup tequila.


    16.
    Up up big bra,
    Cup cup Z-bra (Zebra).


    17.
    Time flies, drink wine.
    Bottom up, stay fine.


    18.
    Eat rice, be wise.
    Good night, sleep tight.


    19.
    I would rather lie on a pie,
    Instead try to fly to sky.

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    Default Re: Help correct couplet.

    Quote Originally Posted by blacknomi
    Dear teachers,

    I'm kind of in a hurry and need your help right now. I am going to teach kids pronunciation, and I've written some simple verses to help them learn and memorize. Would you pls revise and correct bad verses. Thank you very much in advance.



    1.
    A bee sleeps in a tree,
    And we sleep on a seat.


    2.
    I meet her at the beach,
    We drink tea, speak Chinese.


    3.
    Sixty pigs, sexy Dick,
    Sit together with my Nick.


    4.
    Saturday and Sunday are play days,
    I hope they arenít rainy days.


    5.
    Go ahead, rock your head.
    Share me with your happy thread.


    6.
    Big fat cat, big bad cat,
    Are you on the top of map?


    7.
    I sat on an apple pie,
    Looking at a butterfly.


    8.
    Father wants to wash a car,
    But the weatherís hot hot hot.
    Mother wants to watch a clock,
    And the clock says wa-wa-what.


    9.
    Itís twelve at noon,
    Time for soup.
    Itís two to two,
    Time for fruit.


    10.
    I hate to look
    At grammar book,
    Could you cook it
    As a food.


    11.
    Hello, Mr. Window,
    Do you see my fellow?
    Hello, Mrs. Widow,
    Heís lying on a pillow.


    12.
    I bought a ball in a mall,
    I saw a daughter play in fall.


    13.
    Father and mother,
    Bother my brother.
    Teacher called Peter,
    Flirt me in winter.


    14.
    Iím about to walk along,
    and Iím afraid to be alone.


    15.
    Up up umbrella,
    Cup cup tequila.


    16.
    Up up big bra,
    Cup cup Z-bra (Zebra).


    17.
    Time flies, drink wine.
    Bottom up, stay fine.


    18.
    Eat rice, be wise.
    Good night, sleep tight.


    19.
    I would rather lie on a pie,
    Instead try to fly to sky.
    Erm...I'm not sure what to do. You seem to going for rhymes instead of complete sentences. :?

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    Yes, I wrote broken sentences to rhyme.

    Any comment? :D

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    What native language do your students speak?

    I see you're focusing on long vowels. Is that right? :D

    I'd delete 3. ; I'd change 'map' to 'lap' in 6., I love 7. :D; 10. is kind of odd; 11. is quite difficult; I'd rephrase 13., 'Flirt me in winter' ; 14. as well as others, don't rhyme; 15. 'tequila' is hmm; 16. 'big bra' is hmm; 17. change 'bottom' to 'bottoms'.

    All the best,

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    Default Re: Help correct couplet.

    Quote Originally Posted by Casiopea
    What native language do your students speak?
    Chinese.

    Quote Originally Posted by Casiopea
    I see you're focusing on long vowels. Is that right? :D
    I'd like to emphasize on long tense vowels because we don't have that in Chinese pronunciation.

    Most of students, including adults and kids, have problem with non-long lax "i" and egg. For examples, students count numbers like this, one two three four five sex seven eight. "Well you go" instead of "Will you go"

    Quote Originally Posted by Casiopea
    I'd delete 3. ; I'd change 'map' to 'lap' in 6., I love 7. :D; 10. is kind of odd; 11. is quite difficult; I'd rephrase 13., 'Flirt me in winter' ; 14. as well as others, don't rhyme; 15. 'tequila' is hmm; 16. 'big bra' is hmm; 17. change 'bottom' to 'bottoms'.

    All the best,
    Yea, some of the verses are "hmm" examples , I can't think of any off the top my head now. I'll delete #3 and bra examples, and replace "flirt" me in winter, with "teach." Is it better?

    I love #7 too. :P
    I love #10 as well. Student are so yearning to burn grammar books! So I make a rhyme like #10. How odd is it?

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    Default Re: Help correct couplet.

    Quote Originally Posted by blacknomi
    Most of students, including adults and kids, have problem with non-long lax "i" and egg.
    I often find myself correcting students when they pronounce 'egg' as aigg (the 'e' sound rhymes with 'ride'), and 'bed' as 'bide' (same problem). ;)

    [edit] And don't get me started on the pronunciation of 'usually' (pronounced by so many as 'urually') [edit]

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    My own favourite is 'squirelling'. I had a Japanese student last summer who learnt the phrasal verb 'squirel away'. A year later she's progressed to just about getting the number of syllables right. It will probably be recognisable within a few years.

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    Default Re: Help correct couplet.

    Quote Originally Posted by shane
    Quote Originally Posted by blacknomi
    Most of students, including adults and kids, have problem with non-long lax "i" and egg.
    I often find myself correcting students when they pronounce 'egg' as aigg (the 'e' sound rhymes with 'ride'), and 'bed' as 'bide' (same problem). ;)

    [edit] And don't get me started on the pronunciation of 'usually' (pronounced by so many as 'urually') [edit]
    There you go. The fricative " u " in usually. I tell my students, try their best to mimick.

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    Quote Originally Posted by tdol
    My own favourite is 'squirelling'. I had a Japanese student last summer who learnt the phrasal verb 'squirel away'. A year later she's progressed to just about getting the number of syllables right. It will probably be recognisable within a few years.
    Why? Do you mean the spelling of squirelling or the pronunciation?

    (squ-ire-lling)

    I don't much appreciate of words ending as "ance" or "ence". I have to toss a coin. :?

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    Quote Originally Posted by tdol
    My own favourite is 'squirelling'. I had a Japanese student last summer who learnt the phrasal verb 'squirel away'. A year later she's progressed to just about getting the number of syllables right. It will probably be recognisable within a few years.
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    I like wimin (Means, I like swimming)

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